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Title: Overwatch: Food poisoning Reviewer: MyndBlown Signed
Good story! Unfortunately, your older stories are about a few hundred times better. First, of course, this is a matter of opinion, but most of the characters you use are ugly. Pharah, Mei and is decked out in a robot suit. Zarya is fat (or really muscular). Widowmaker is purple and doesn't have a very good figure. Only Symmetra and Mercy look good. Secondly, the story was short. None of the characters got a lot of spotlight. Finally, all the scenes were a little confusing. You merged them together which made it hard to keep track of one single character. If your story were cleaned up according to this review, I would give this story a 4.5-star rating. Currently, I rate it 3 stars.

Author's Response: Well, technically Pharah wasn't in her suit when going to the out house, i imagined she look like what Micro drew on his tumbler, the looks wasn't what i was going for, more like the interactions of the characters so they kinda share the spotlight... a realy small spotlight for 4-5 ladies doing their buisness, although i probably should have explained where the groups were so my apologies for that, but i'm glad you liked it
Date: Aug 12, 2016 06:46 pm [Report This]
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