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Title: The Relief Reviewer: doneilababyfart Signed
i was laughing the whole time
Date: Jun 15, 2012 03:12 pm [Report This]
Title: The Relief Reviewer: NoMarcy Signed
Haha nice story, indeed. The only thing that gets me is,... Why wasn't Knuckles invited for the celebration if he was the one who busted his own butt to get the emerald?
Date: Dec 21, 2010 03:06 am [Report This]
Title: The Relief Reviewer: pokiemun Signed
cool story bro
Date: Oct 06, 2010 05:44 pm [Report This]
Title: The Relief Reviewer: EagleWing Signed
Fairly cute, not a bad work overall. Could use some improvement though.
Date: Aug 06, 2010 06:27 pm [Report This]
Title: The Relief Reviewer: T3hL33tSnake Signed
Bravissimo, I came waterfalls! :)
Date: Mar 05, 2010 04:18 pm [Report This]
Title: The Relief Reviewer: S.T. the Kitsune Signed

I wonder why this had no ratings nor a few reviews. For starters you just made a setting out of clear blue without giving a valid description to where it all begins. You also tried to make the situation look like that its going to happen without any explanation.

Also the other reason why is that not many people are furry fans like I am especially a sonic fan. This story could of been better yet with little effort you put into it. You do have potential but think it through before making a story like this one.

Date: Feb 17, 2008 02:01 am [Report This]
Title: The Relief Reviewer: DrBones Signed
Wow, I get first shot at this one, usually I'm the last.

I've never actually played any Sonic game or really gotten into the anime so I have only the barest knowledge of the characters and setting from places like fanart sites and Wikipedia, and I still enjoyed this. I assume you took the description of Amy eating from Malachi's drawing, which is good as I love stories and pics. that tie together. I would have liked this to be longer and include more detail and action but it is a good, solid first story (no offense intended, my first one was only so long because I took two whole years to jerk around with it!)

I will say I didn't find the splitting up into one page sub-chapters to be necessary. Some people use blank lines and *** to show time cuts or scene changes and that seems to work well. On a personal note, I love girls using outhouses so I would have liked a physical description of the female guard and her dump. Just as an idea for how it could be expanded. I did enjoy the actual poop scene, the descriptions and dialog where realistic (by bathroom fanfiction standards) and enjoyable.
Date: Jan 20, 2008 03:36 pm [Report This]
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