Reviews For Angela\'s Weekend
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Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: devimo89 Signed

WOW its a great story

I LOVE IT

Date: Aug 11, 2008 12:40 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Not half bad, but it could use a little work.

There should've been a bit more build up to the dump, maybe even a moment with her considering on soiling simply as a means to find a new activity to pass time with. I would say the ending felt a little rushed, but nothing too hasty or thrown together.

Overall, a good effort.

Date: Mar 04, 2008 12:33 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Poowrite Signed
Good work. It was pretty short, but directly to the point. The descriptions of the accident were very well done.

In the future you might try focusing a little on describing the character physically and maybe a bit more detail on what she's thinking and how she feels when before the accident.

Aside from that, really good work. I enjoyed it :)
Date: Mar 03, 2008 11:41 pm [Report This]
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