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Title: Chapter 2 Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

About time..... I was wondering if I had to use that favor from Boba Fett to get you to write this chapter.... Just kidding :P

But still very good, an interesting touch with the yuri element, there aren't terribly many of these kind of stories, at least with the pooping element added.

Now a bit of fair criticism. I do think Rikku's whole seduction of Yuna kinda seems a bit sudden. One moments she's just enjoying her 'ritual' and the next she's snogging a girl whose supposed to be her first cousin. Also, I think maybe Yuna might have gotten a bit overjoyed for someone on her first purposeful accident, but then again I could be mistaken.

 

Overall, a great addition to an already good short story. Kudos.



Author's Response: I agree that Rikku's seduction and Yuna's enthusiasm seemed very sudden and perhaps I should've handled it with a bit more subtlety.  However I had the idea from the very beggining to make this story charge headlong into that strong sexuality.  And as far as them being cousins go I think I'll quote 4chan "Incest?  Seems more like wincest, amirite guys?!"
Date: May 02, 2008 10:46 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Poowrite Signed
Indeed, a great one. I, too, hold onto hope that we will one day see a part two involving a messy Yuna accident.

Glad to see this one posted here.
Date: Mar 27, 2008 07:20 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

I still hope to see a part two with Yuna, and don't try to weasel out by saying the short in "Almost Made it" counted :P

I have to say, Rikku and pantypooping seem like peanut butter and jelly, they just go together so well. She certainly has the spunky personality most pantypooping girls have.

 

Great work as always, can't wait to see more!

Date: Mar 26, 2008 10:57 pm [Report This]
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