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Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Pretty good, a nice quick little tale of misfortune. Shame there isn't a pic to go along with this, but you did paint a good idea of what the scene looks like.

The occasional spelling errors and what not, otherwise a nice fic. Great work.

Date: Oct 11, 2008 12:12 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Jimmy Olsen Signed
This is fun! It's great to see so many of my challenges turned into stories all of a sudden, and this one does not disappoint. Possibly the best part is your description of Jessica's semi-accident, which is quite vivid. As for minuses, it shifts between present and past tense, like your last story, and I feel like you could've done more with the ending.
Date: Oct 10, 2008 03:00 pm [Report This]
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