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Title: Multitasker Reviewer: LiveOffGold101 Signed
this is a decent story, i do belive it ended a bit abruptly however, it could do with a 2nd chapter ro maybe even a sequel. but i liked it, little in the way of scat content but i still liked it.
Date: Jun 23, 2012 06:27 pm [Report This]
Title: Multitasker Reviewer: Poowrite Signed
Excellent work. I have to say this was one of the absolute best stories we've had here. If this is the result of an Orpheum / Jimmy Olsen collabrative work, I say you guys need to work together more often XD.

I can't really think of anything I didn't enjoy about this story. The descriptions of the pooping were top-notch. The situations Chisa was put through were well thought out and I found myself actually laughing out loud a few times.

Excellent work.

Author's Response:

Thanks. It was a fun story to write.

Now let's see some new Yuna story soon :P She needs some lovin'! ;)

Date: Sep 23, 2010 01:02 pm [Report This]
Title: Multitasker Reviewer: Toasty Signed
Great job, Orpheum and Jimmy! I loved the story, loved the comedy. It held true to all the best farcical traditions. I thought the dream sequence was very clever, as were a lot of other parts. Plus, I'm sure a lot of readers can identify with the premise (I remember one time getting an hour of sleep, waking up, sprinting to the library to print my history paper with nothing in my stomach but a bottle of Vault, sprinting to class, and showing up fifteen minutes late. I was the first presenter of the day, of course!)

The only part I didn't like was some pieces of the description at the beginning. "Adipose tissue" in particular was a bit much, I thought. It felt kind of like I was reading a medical textbook instead of a story.

Other than that, there weren't any parts that particularly made me think "Oh, this section was obviously written by Jimmy and not Orpheum," so good job collaborating there.

Overall, excellent work. It was really long, but it kept me interested the whole time. What more can you ask for?

Author's Response:

Well I'm glad you enjoyed. The 'adipose tissue' was something Jimmy added. And I might change that simply because it did seem unnecessary, but whatever. It was definately fun writing the thing, and I did like the expansion jimmy did (the dream, the glasses needing to be fixed, and the run in with boys in the hall, all his).


Thanks for the review, as always.

Date: Aug 21, 2010 01:14 am [Report This]
Title: Multitasker Reviewer: JWPoop Signed
This is BY FAR AND AWAY the best scat Story I have ever read in my life!!! BRAVO!!!!!!-- JW

Author's Response: Thanks. Glad you liked it. Don't forget though that Jimmy helped flesh it out.
Date: Aug 17, 2010 01:49 pm [Report This]
Title: Multitasker Reviewer: EnragedFilia Signed
If the Anime Lover story you're talking about is the one based on Saikano, I'm pretty sure her name is supposed to be spelled 'Chise', so you're technically in the clear!

More importantly, excellent fic you've got here. It's a little fast-paced, but that's just cause there's so much interesting stuff happening at once.

Now if you want to keep going, this poor girl has got to find a way to turn lemons into lemonade. My first thought is that she ends up with a guy who can properly 'appreciate' the events of the last 2 hours. Then my second thought is that once she gets over the shock (presumably with a little help from the guy), she discovers that today's public humiliation has awakened a hidden taste for exhibitionism.

Remember: when a story goes too far to turn back, keep on going and never stop!

Author's Response: I don't know. Chisa certainly has enough potential for more stories, but I might not bother. Of course, if Jimmy is interested, he's certainly welcome to using the character in future exploits.
Date: Aug 17, 2010 12:33 am [Report This]
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