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Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Unsung Soldier Signed
Nice job with anticipation. Hope to read more.
Date: Feb 04, 2013 09:18 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: LiveOffGold101 Signed
i liked this story, a lot. You could write another chapter, but a different story in the same context (girl and Diarrhea) would be just as good.
Date: Jun 23, 2012 09:28 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: killyoself Signed

GReat first story!! keep up the good work

 

Date: Mar 02, 2011 11:02 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Not half bad, not half bad at all. It's definitely nice to see a Pokemon story, and one based on that little comic (which I figured was the inspiration before I read this).

If I had to say, this could use some expanding. Namely it would work to extend some parts here and there (like more interaction with the trainers, maybe even other Nurses too) that way everything flows more evenly and doesn't jump around too much. As for the dump, it might work to work more details and sounds from Joy (maybe even some of the dialogue from the comic too ;P).



Author's Response:

Heh, I was tempted to use some of the comic's lines, but I figured I'd come up with my own dialogue.

As for other Nurses, I was going off of the assumption that there is only one Nurse Joy per center, as in the games/anime (unless I'm mistaken for the anime part).

Maybe I'll edit this in the near future, or just add a new chapter altogether. I do want to thank you for reviewing my story; you're one of my favorite authors, and it's nice to see yours as my first review.

Date: Mar 02, 2011 04:12 am [Report This]
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