Reviews For A Tough Lesson
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: packrat Signed
That...was great!  After reading that stoy, I'm glad you modified my idea.  I espcially like the ending you gave her.
Date: Aug 01, 2012 01:05 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Funny. Have to wonder what kind of class though would go into so much detail about this, far as I recall it was always just reproductive stuff, not the differences of male and female bladder/bowels.

Which makes me think, you ought to consider a "sequel" with Siphrah having to poop, heheh.



Author's Response: It is more in-depth than a usual high school science class. I suppose I should have said it was part of the Advanced Placement Program. I could write a story about bowel desperation during a lesson on the digestive system, but I don't think I want to use the same gimmick twice.
Date: Jul 03, 2012 08:30 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: EnragedFilia Signed
Excellent indeed, although it did seem to lose focus after the 'main event'. That always seems to happen to me if I don't plan everything in enough detail. I found the anatomy lesson useful insofar as it causes both the audience and poor Siphrah to think about exactly what's happening to her in the same way at the same time.
Date: Jun 30, 2012 07:56 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Sexy Sketches Anonymous

Love it! Glad you left out the extra stuff with the urinary system, the amount you had started to wear on me. haha, but Im glad that you did have detail in her subject. It would have been really awsome if there was more with the other student that needed to pee. Like if she came in the second room to do the same thing.

 Anyway, really awesome. 



Author's Response: Glad you liked it! I find human anatomy fascinating, and the urinary system lesson was the key plot point of the challenge, so I had to have something. But maybe I went overboard. I didn't realize it before, but Stacy the student does seem like a loose end. Maybe I'll add something to resolve her problem. Thanks for the review! I suggest you post on the forum, because you could probably get several commissions.
Date: Jun 30, 2012 04:35 pm [Report This]


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