This feel a bit dated. I don't know, it just sounds like Samus was dropped into modern day or something, not some outpost in space. And why does it sound like one moment she's in the zero suit, then in civies the next? Also, quite a few spelling/grammar issues here and there.
Needs some work down.
Author's Response: Maybe I wasn't clear, she was wearing normal clothes over her suit. Yeah I suppose the setting doesn't match the actual setting but it was just a short story so meh.