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Title: Accident and Punishment Reviewer: Jimmy Olsen Signed
I'm afraid I don't have much to say that SakuraLover didn't already say. It's a good plot but it reads like a list of events. I didn't feel like a scene was playing out in front of me. Work on expanding the details and you could be a fine writer.
Date: Sep 16, 2012 02:10 am [Report This]
Title: Accident and Punishment Reviewer: SakuraLover25 Signed
It's good, but like I said the devil's in the details. So put more than just a line and make it a paragraph, explain the process and how it feels. Plus, humiliation never hurt so try expanding on that.
Date: Sep 10, 2012 08:39 am [Report This]
Title: Accident and Punishment Reviewer: SakuraLover25 Signed
Pretty good. I liked the idea and how Tsunade exercised complete control over Shizune. Still could have used more detail, both pissing scenes needed more on the emotional and physical impact. It's a good start and I'm always happy to see more Naruto fics!

Author's Response: Gee thanks. I just thought this up from the top of my head. What did you think of Tsunade peeing herself?
Date: Sep 09, 2012 10:00 pm [Report This]
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