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Title: The Platform Reviewer: Jimmy Olsen Signed
I have almost nothing but praise for this story. The idea of a diaper vending machine randomly sitting in a backstreet somewhere (and hinted to be somehow otherworldly) should be silly, but you somehow treat this device in a way that it doesn't sully the realistic slice of life story.

Right away you paint a vivid picture of the protagonist and setting. It gets more fun as Madison's desperate motions get progressively worse.

The mention of drunken parties where her and her friend casually wet themselves adds a nice little wrinkle the the character, and a promising seed for another story.

Your description of Madison's relaxing pee is the best part. I think it's the most detailed diaper-wetting I've ever read, and the wording is so eloquent. You also choose your words well when she's debating with herself. "A grown twenty-something coming home from her job, needing to go potty in a diaper beneath her big-girl work uniform because she couldn’t hold it till she got home?" I love her thoughts about "a payload of evidence" and "the right to pee as she pleased" as well. It's a common sort of thought in these fics, but the way it's expressed here seems fresh (even if Madison's diaper isn't).

The only thing I can find to complain about in the whole story is her bladder capacity. You say it begins to taper off after two minutes. Either my idea of the human bladder is way off, or she's got superheroic holding powers.

This is a terrific story, and I hope to read more about this mysterious Urbanbrook Machine (even though it seems like no sequel could top this).
Date: Aug 17, 2014 05:04 am [Report This]
Title: The Platform Reviewer: limearray Signed
Hey, I saw when you posted this in the /d/ thread! Glad to see it somewhere less transient than pastebin!
Date: Aug 05, 2014 10:37 am [Report This]
Title: The Platform Reviewer: Anastyanax Signed
This may be the best wetting desperation story I've ever read. Excellent pacing, thorough yet concise description...flawless.
Date: Aug 03, 2014 09:59 pm [Report This]
Title: The Platform Reviewer: sjk26 Signed
I've never written a review here before, but this was simply amazing. The writing was great, and the details of her diaper wetting were excellent. I love that she ended up loving the experience of letting it go in her diaper, and the descriptions of how full it was were perfect. After finishing this story I immediately clicked your name to see what else you wrote and found out that you're the same writer as Amanda and Alyssa, another one of my favorites here (despite never getting to the diapers)! PLEASE write more of this new Urbanbrook story. I can't wait to see more of Madison's newfound love for diapers, or even more entries about other girls who use these diapers.
Date: Aug 03, 2014 09:19 am [Report This]
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