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Title: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: andreww9933 on August 26, 2009, 02:02:51 PM
This is a direct request to you OrpheumZero. You do great stories, right up there on the same level as poowrite. Maybe even better. You're one of my favorite authors. So here are my challenges to you. The first one is simple. I want a resident evil 3 story, where jill wets and shits herself in an alley. You can build what ever story and plotline you want, I just want her ultimate and untimely humiliation to happen in an alley. Pretty simple. The other wont be as simple unless you watched gundam wing. I want a story where Relena Peacecraft is rushed to get ready so she can speak at one of her diplomatic events.She doesn't have time to use the facilities and winds up with soaking wet panties packing a load in them. If you watched the show then you know what I mean when I say I'd like to have it set during the Queen Relena arc. You're one of the few authors that I fully believe could pull off either if not both. I'm not saying there isn't a lot of great talent here, there is. You're just one of the best. I know this should probably be in the challenge section, but honestly i don't want just anyone making a half-hearted attempt at these. You're one of the very few that could even hope to pull these off. Please don't get mad at me for messaging you directly. Like I said, you're one of the few authors I believe could do this right. Please respond and let me know what you think.

P.S.  Others are welcome to try, I'm just partial to OrpheumZero and Poowrite.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: OrpheumZero on August 26, 2009, 11:24:16 PM
I'll consider, it's been like, 10 year since I saw Gundam Wing back on cartoon network. I had to wiki the stuff since I could barely remember most of it, though I had thought she simply became a diplomat. I could think of something, but I'm not making any guarantees.

As for the Jill story, haven't really got a clue on what to make outside of a simple "Jill shits herself". So I may let Jimmy or someone take a shot at these.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on August 27, 2009, 05:12:50 PM
I don't really know "Resident Evil," but maybe if somebody links me to a scene with Jill on YouTube I could write a fear-induced accident scene based on it.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Poowrite on August 27, 2009, 07:01:46 PM
I'm afraid I was never hugely fond of Jill Valentine or Gundam Wing. On the subject of Resident Evil girls, I have been wanting to do something with Rebecca Chambers for a while now.

Jimmy, here's a link to the intro for Resident Evil 3. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zLqNaE36cGs (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zLqNaE36cGs)

Not sure if that's enough to go off of, but I'm a huge fan of Resident Evil and I would love to see what you (or anyone, for that matter) came up with.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on August 27, 2009, 08:58:44 PM
It would help if I could see Jill personally in action.  Are there any cutscenes of her being menaced?  Preferably something jumping out of nowhere at her?
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: andreww9933 on August 27, 2009, 09:49:06 PM
Thanks Orpheum, you're one of the greatest. If you could come up with something I would truly love it. And Jimmy, anything you come up with I'm sure would be good coming from an author of your caliber. you to are one of the greats of this site. If it helps, Jill's specs from RE3 are as follows: Height 5', light brown hair,short and parted in the middle. She wears a tight blue halter, fairly busty. she wears a short, tight black hipster skirt with a sweater tied around her waist. Her story is that after an incident involving zombies in a mountain mansion, the creatures escaped and leaked into the city. now the city is infested with zombies and other creatures, and her mission is to escape the city alive. It may also help you to look up images of Nemesis from RE3. He stalks her throughout the came, and they have many encounters. Thanks to you all.

P.S.   Poowrite, I really think a story with Rebecca would be AWESOME. I would LOVE to read that. Hope to see something from you soon.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: OrpheumZero on August 27, 2009, 09:51:18 PM
Oh there should be plenty of gameplay footage on youtube, speed runs, and fun playthrough, etc.

I might try to take a stab at one or both, but I'm not too sure yet. I only played the first 10 minutes of RE3 until a little after you first encounter the Nemesis. The Gundam Wing could work, but I'll have to work on the concept...
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on August 28, 2009, 05:11:28 AM
Okay, I'll do some searching...
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: andreww9933 on August 29, 2009, 08:30:11 PM
Thanks guys. I'm sure anything either of you do will be really great!!! Hope to see something soon.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on September 02, 2009, 01:44:49 AM
Thanks to this thread and the research I've done I had a dream the other night about Jill pooping her pants.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: livinginfinite on September 02, 2009, 02:53:47 AM
Hey, that's awesome...if I could lucid dream reliably I would make stuff like that happen all the time. :P
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on September 02, 2009, 08:12:19 PM
It's not the best dream I've had lately.  The ones that make me really sad to wake up are the romantic (and sometimes corny) ones rather than the sexy ones.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: livinginfinite on September 02, 2009, 08:18:42 PM
Well, that's why I'd rather have sexy dreams...they aren't heartbreaking when they're over.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on September 02, 2009, 08:24:51 PM
But they're not as enjoyable while they're happening (at least for me).
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: livinginfinite on September 02, 2009, 09:06:58 PM
Yeah, I agree to that, but all things considered I'd rather not start my day feeling like I've lost the love of my life forever.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: OrpheumZero on September 03, 2009, 12:22:41 AM
Could be worst.... I once had a dayterror from a concussion about my family leaving me behind on a winding road for no reason, just drifting away into the distance. It seriously felt real until I woke up afterwards.

But yea, losing someone you care about in a dream can be tough, or getting rejected... :-[ I recall one where a girl I was kinda crushing on turns and say we can't be together. Eerie, lol. :P
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on September 03, 2009, 12:28:21 AM
Wow, you guys are getting a lot more deep than what I was talking about.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: andreww9933 on September 03, 2009, 06:13:27 PM
LOL, glad I could help Jimmy. But I agree, I'd rather have a straight up sex dream than a frilly romantic one(and I happen to be a hopeless romantic by nature). They don't hurt as much unlesss you wake up right before the good part.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on September 03, 2009, 09:25:48 PM
I've never actually had a straight up sex dream.  I've just had about 6 or 8 dreams about my wedding where I woke up right before my bride and I consummated the marriage.  I have had "hot" dreams, never a dream where i had sex.

Back on topic, what do you want Jill to be wearing?  I've seen pictures of her in a couple different outfits, and I don't want to have to pick which one she ruins.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: livinginfinite on September 04, 2009, 03:59:26 PM
Well, I know it's not my request but I'm gonna put in my vote for the S.T.A.R.S. uniform. ;)
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Toasty on September 04, 2009, 08:49:12 PM
Quote from: livinginfinite on September 04, 2009, 03:59:26 PM
Well, I know it's not my request but I'm gonna put in my vote for the S.T.A.R.S. uniform. ;)

I second that motion!
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on September 04, 2009, 09:23:30 PM
So this? http://www.cosplay.com/photo/1437288/
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: OrpheumZero on September 04, 2009, 09:45:04 PM
Well if the story is set during RE3, then it would be her blue halter top and black skirt with the white 't' tied around her waist. That's her default outfit *as S.T.A.R.S was disbanded after the first game, if I recall correctly*.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: andreww9933 on September 05, 2009, 01:34:06 AM
That's exactly right Orpheum. The chief from RE2 was the one that disbanded S.T.A.R.S at the order of Umbrella Corp. when Chris, Jill, and the others got to close to the proof. That's when they all split up (after RE3 that is) and went to take down Umbrella little by little on their own. But yes, I do want her to wet and poop her original halter skirt and sweater outfit from RE3. But make it more of a desperation wetting and pooping than a fear one if you can. Jill just isn't one to be afraid of anything after the horrors of RE1. Shocked maybe, scared, not likely. I mean, after all, you'd get pretty desperate to if you spent HOURS in a city so infested with zombies to the point that every turn you took you heard shuffling feet and the moans of the undead searching for their next snack, trying your damnedest to make sure you're not the main course. Who has time to be afraid in a situation like that. (In case you can't tell, I'm a zombie officinato lol). So I think she'd get desperate to the point that she finally just couldn't hold it any more before she would soil herself out of fear.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: OrpheumZero on September 05, 2009, 09:34:15 PM
She could be a little scared, I mean, Nemesis certainly wasn't something she was expectiong. But it could go that she gets unnerved by the near fatal encounter and then that builds atop a growing desperation.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: andreww9933 on September 05, 2009, 10:54:01 PM
Possible, but you have to remember that she had faced Tyrant in the mansion as well. So she had already had experience with giant mutated freaks of nature and science. I'm sure she may have been a little shocked and slightly shaken by his appearance, but not terrified or anything like that. She'd be desperate for sure though. All that running around and no time for a bathroom break. Poor girl could use one I'm sure. and I hope I'm not annoying you but have you had any ideas for my other victim?
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: andreww9933 on September 11, 2009, 01:49:14 AM
Hope I'm not breaking any double post rules, but this thread sure got quite all of a sudden.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on September 11, 2009, 03:02:31 AM
I know what I'm going to write for Jill, it's just a matter of finding the time to do it.  As for the Gundam fic, I don't think I know enough about that universe to write it.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: andreww9933 on September 11, 2009, 10:32:55 PM
Okay, cool. Maybe I'll get lucky on the other end and Orpheum will write the gundam story(fingers crossed). Hope to see your story soon.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on September 20, 2009, 09:20:59 PM
Sorry the Jill story is taking so long.  Finishing it is 3rd on my list of things to do tomorrow, after my job interview and scrubbing the house.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: andreww9933 on September 22, 2009, 12:34:09 AM
Awesome. I can't wait to read it. I'll bet it's going to be a good one too given your other stories.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on September 23, 2009, 01:51:24 AM
Sorry, further delays with various causes.  But don't worry, I've done the research, I've set the scene, I've set up the accident, and the rest should fall into place very soon.

I do appreciate what you said about my stories.  ;D
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: andreww9933 on September 23, 2009, 03:58:50 PM
What can I say, your stories never displease me. And I can be patient so I don't mind waiting a little longer. That will just make it even better in the end!!!!! ;D
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on September 25, 2009, 01:16:07 AM
It's game over for Jill's panties!  Link (http://nyou.animegirldesp.org/nf/viewstory.php?sid=358&action=viewstory)

Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: andreww9933 on September 25, 2009, 12:02:11 PM
Awesome story man, I really appreciate it. Once again your stories never cease to please. Thanks a million. And the best part is that's about how it would have played out too!!! ;D guess Orpheum gave up on the gundam story LOL. No biggy though. Thanks guys. I appreciate everything. Now if someone will just do the Ben 10 story......
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: OrpheumZero on September 25, 2009, 01:48:42 PM
Quote from: andreww9933 on September 25, 2009, 12:02:11 PM
guess Orpheum gave up on the gundam story LOL. No biggy though. Thanks guys. I appreciate everything. Now if someone will just do the Ben 10 story......

Oh shut up :P I never said I wouldn't do the Gundam Story, I just said I wasn't sure. Maybe in a little while I can whip something up. Just need to get myself a little reaquinted with Relena's character.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: andreww9933 on September 25, 2009, 10:34:55 PM
LOL hahaha, I was only kidding ;D. I figured if you did one it would take a while because  1) It's been a LONG time since Gundam wing has been on(DAMN IT) and 2) I gave you a pretty decent challenge that would take a good bit of thought and effort to come up with something really good. Which is what you are good at. So I can be patient LOL.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: OrpheumZero on September 25, 2009, 10:38:39 PM
Quote from: andreww9933 on September 25, 2009, 10:34:55 PM
LOL hahaha, I was only kidding ;D. I figured if you did one it would take a while because  1) It's been a LONG time since Gundam wing has been on(DAMN IT) and 2) I gave you a pretty decent challenge that would take a good bit of thought and effort to come up with something really good. Which is what you are good at. So I can be patient LOL.

Actually not so. It was only maybe a a few seconds after reading the challenge the first time that I came up with something along the same lines as "Peache's Poo". Basically Relena, dressed in a diplomatic outfit *since I recall her wearing something to that effect* is delivering a speech, all the while a massive tower of crap is pressing to escape from her. She struggles through, giving a rousing and impassioned conference, then slinks off and has a colossal accident. Yea... It was probably not even 4 seconds after reading I thought of all that.  :P
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: andreww9933 on September 26, 2009, 11:15:00 AM
Hmmm, sounds like an interesting read if I do say so myself. Hope I get to read it soon.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on October 01, 2009, 01:29:08 AM
Do you have any more requests for me?
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: livinginfinite on October 01, 2009, 04:38:46 AM
Jimmy, you should do a story about Cammy soiling herself after losing a fight ;D

(I know, I know, you weren't talking to me :P)
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on October 01, 2009, 12:33:58 PM
You can request something if you want (and that goes for everyone else, too).  I make no promises, though.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: andreww9933 on October 02, 2009, 11:09:44 PM
Actually, a street fighter fic does sound nice, but i personally am more partial to chun-li.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: livinginfinite on October 03, 2009, 12:18:32 AM
Damn it, so is Jimmy. Now there's no way he'll do a Cammy story. >:(

BUT...maybe you could have Cammy vs. Chun Li and they both have accidents. ;)
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on October 03, 2009, 02:30:18 AM
Quote from: livinginfinite on October 03, 2009, 12:18:32 AM
BUT...maybe you could have Cammy vs. Chun Li and they both have accidents. ;)

I don't know how that would happen, unless they're playing some kinky version of "Street Fighter" where the object is to make your opponent lose bladder control instead of consciousness...and both their health meters run out at the same time.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: livinginfinite on October 03, 2009, 03:22:51 AM
Double KO's happen, you know :P

But it could happen like in that one anime, where one girl makes the other soil herself and assumes she's won the fight, and the other takes advantage of the distraction and delivers a finishing blow.

Besides, accidents can happen at any point in the fight due to exertion...you've seen that gymnastics photo of the girl peeing during a backflip, right? Cammy does backflips all the time. ;D
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on October 04, 2009, 01:59:45 AM
Quote from: livinginfinite on October 03, 2009, 03:22:51 AM
Double KO's happen, you know :P

I know.  I've played "Street Fighter II."  Lots.  I've never played the version with Cammy, though.


Quote from: livinginfinite on October 03, 2009, 03:22:51 AMBut it could happen like in that one anime, where one girl makes the other soil herself and assumes she's won the fight, and the other takes advantage of the distraction and delivers a finishing blow.

What anime is this and where do I buy it?!?  :o


Quote from: livinginfinite on October 03, 2009, 03:22:51 AMBesides, accidents can happen at any point in the fight due to exertion...you've seen that gymnastics photo of the girl peeing during a backflip, right? Cammy does backflips all the time. ;D

I've seen that photo, but it's faked.  Somebody found the non-Photoshopped version.

The bottom line is, I might be able to write this fic, but I'm not promising anything.  Is there anything else you'd like me to write about?
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: livinginfinite on October 04, 2009, 02:30:11 AM
The gymnast photo is fake?! I'm amazed...it was on a legitimate photo site and everything. But I guess I could refer to that weightlifter wetting herself...imagine that happening during Cammy's German suplex ;D

The anime I was referring to is Ikki Tousen or something like that, I saw the clip on youtube this one time. No idea where to find it now, but there's a few wetting scenes in it apparently.

A similar thing happens in the first episode of Queen's Blade...that is, the heroine wets herself from fright (twice in the episode, actually) but ends up winning the fight anyways.

Anyways, other requests, hmm...you know how using a sleeping bag makes it disappear in FF, right? I've always wanted to read a story about FF6's Terra or Celes having a nightmare and wetting/messing in a sleeping bag.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on October 05, 2009, 01:31:20 PM
Yeah, some stupid British tabloid Photoshopped a pic and made up a story.

What's a good/relevant site for "Final Fantasy VI" info?
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: livinginfinite on October 05, 2009, 03:34:19 PM
http://faqs.ign.com/articles/429/429392p1.html (http://faqs.ign.com/articles/429/429392p1.html)
http://finalfantasy.wikia.com/wiki/Terra_Branford (http://finalfantasy.wikia.com/wiki/Terra_Branford)
http://finalfantasy.wikia.com/wiki/Celes_Chere (http://finalfantasy.wikia.com/wiki/Celes_Chere)

You know, I said Terra or Celes soiling a sleeping bag but maybe I'd like it better if it were Terra AND Celes. ;D
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on October 05, 2009, 08:53:02 PM
Nice info!  Those are a couple of cuties. ;D Do you know where I can find any screenshots, videos, or fanart of one of them in a sleeping bag?  That would help me visualize it. 

I already have an idea for how to incorporate both girls into the story.  Don't expect much plot, though.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: livinginfinite on October 05, 2009, 09:49:14 PM
Haha yeah, I think they're my favorite FF girls! :) Though I'm starting to take a liking to Faris from FF5 as well...imagine the bathroom trouble she must've gotten into, pretending to be a man on a pirate ship for all those years . ;)

Anyways, I've actually never seen a picture along those lines, unfortunately....I even tried to draw one myself, but it didn't work out. In the game you just use them like potions, so no screenshots, except...

(http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/finalfantasy/images/0/0a/FF6_Save_Point.gif)

If it helps, these are the kinds of places you can use sleeping bags and tents, other than out in the fields. But I suspect they'd be more likely to have nightmares while sleeping in a dark dungeon filled with monsters. ;)

I'm excited about your story idea though!
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on October 05, 2009, 10:47:47 PM
This story is looking more and more do-able! ^-^ I love setting stories in the inside of caves (don't read anything Freudian into that). 

Just a couple questions.  Does Terra have blonde hair or green hair in "Final Fantasy VI?"  Do the characters have sleepwear, or do they sleep in their impractical costumes (or in the buff, perhaps)?  And finally, one of the girls in this fic is going to be in the spotlight more than the other, so which would you like it to be?
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: livinginfinite on October 05, 2009, 11:25:43 PM
Terra's got blond hair, tinted teal. The teal is more visible in certain lighting. Kind of like Sniper Wolf actually...

In-game, they appear to sleep in their costumes. While you might not necessarily take that literally, I think it'd be pretty hot if they had to do the rest of the dungeon in soiled clothes. But however you choose to interpret it, I'd prefer they didn't sleep naked, just 'cause I like dirty laundry. :P

I'd prefer it if the story focused on Celes...'cause I think she'd be more embarrassed about having an accident, being a love interest for Locke as well as a former general. Tough choice though, I hope they both get a fair share of the spotlight!
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Linkx on October 06, 2009, 02:09:59 AM
Was lurking like normal and found the Queen's Blade episode with the two wetting scenes, I thought they were pretty good If anyone's interested, the first is at 3:38 she is being choked and the second is at 18:40 and she wets herself out of fear, who doesn't love a good fear wetting.

http://phoanime.com/view?t=a&ep=5585

It's got a pretty rough english translation but it's decent enough to where to can figure out what's going on.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on October 06, 2009, 10:36:50 PM
Thanks for the info.  I'll get to work on this once my entry in Yarr's contest is finished.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: andreww9933 on October 21, 2009, 04:06:05 PM
Wow, haven't heard from Jimmy or Orpheum in a WHILE. (shouting) HEY GUYS, ANYONE HOME?
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on October 22, 2009, 01:18:34 PM
I'll start on the Celes and Terra fic once the fic I'm working on is finished.  The current word count is 9,300.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: andreww9933 on November 08, 2009, 11:53:25 PM
this thread seems so dead lol.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on November 11, 2009, 08:18:35 PM
Sorry, but my "FF6" story is being postponed indefinitely.  Right now I'd have to do the research on one computer and write the story on another.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: livinginfinite on November 14, 2009, 03:03:11 PM
Story aside, I hope you're back soon, 'cause these forums are pretty dead without you around. ;D
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Jimmy Olsen on November 25, 2009, 09:14:26 PM
Glad to be wanted! ^-^ I've resurrected the story, but the plot has changed some.  It may not be what you want, but it makes it easier for me to write.  Wait and it will come...eventually.
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: andreww9933 on December 01, 2009, 10:58:56 PM
Guess I haven't contributed much either. I'm wanting someone to do a Velma story where she wets herself. It's in the challenges board if anyone is interested :).
Title: Re: A Request For OrpheumZero!!!
Post by: Harry-Topper on September 04, 2011, 12:58:32 PM
Say, does anybody remember Danny Phantom? I've watched that show, too, and in my opinion, Star is the cutest of the females (she's my fave DP girl).

I know it sounds unusual of me to ask, but I'd like to see Star sitting on the toilet in her bathroom with her pants and panties pulled down to her feet and looking at herself in the mirror, saying how cute she is especially on the potty!