As ive left the Sakura series in orpheum and sharkbaits c(r)apable hands, there will be a small comic instead of story as my swansong.
Short story is Sakura is bunged up after some serious eating and is trying to shake things loose. Eventually she succeeds, but will the poor toilet survive?
So far only the images is coming along, feel free to suggest dialogue/story elements.
Panel1:
(http://img844.imageshack.us/img844/568/sbts1line1.jpg)
:-X in the words of Michael Cole in WWE, OH MY!! O_O good lord sakura got a big asre, way to show off show some behind, right uncle yarr?
Swansong? Do you mean you're leaving? :'(
That's a nice picture. I like how it has no overt signs of poop, gas, or desperation. You let the 3 items by her bed tell the story. Clever ;D
I have a few ideas for Sakura stories. Actually, I've posted all these ideas before, and some of them aren't even mine. :)
1. Sakura takes a serious beating, and is laid up (and bunged up) in the hospital for a while. Her injury is so bad that she can't get to the bathroom, or even wipe herself. The nurse who attends to her has a huge job on her hands, since a single dump from that rump can fill several bedpans.
2. Sakura is constipated (big surprise). Someone who learns of this (and may be slightly insane) is determined to give her an enema for her own good. They end up going to great lengths to "help" the reluctant girl.
3. Since public toilets have been "vandalized" by Sakura, a (female) security guard won't let her enter one, and they fight. In a bit of poetic justice, the toilet defender has an accident when she's knocked unconscious.
4. Sakura's bowels are so superhuman that scientists want to study her. She'll collect money if she consents to some very intimate research into the workings of her digestive system. At first she says "no, you dirty old men." But when she'd IDed as the toilet vandal and forced to pay hefty fines for her hefty loads, she realizes she needs that money.
5. Sakura is on board a plane, and lets off a fart so loud it sounds like an explosion. That, combined with someone overhearing her talking about feeling ready to explode, lead the authorities to think she's carrying a bomb. She is strip-searched, making her dump her "carry-on luggage."
6. Some stuck-up chick royally pisses Sakura off. Rather than simply beating her up, Sakura chooses a more cunning and humiliating method. She clogs someone's toilet and somehow frames the other girl for doing the deed.
7. Sakura suffers a head injury and blacks out. When she recovers, it at first seems like there's been no damage. But when she has to poop, she doesn't know where to go or what to do, because she can't remember what a toilet is, much less how to use one.
8. Sakura, Chun-Li, and some other cuties decide to have a non-violent challenge for a change (although, with all the taunting, insults, and accusations of cheating, it may escalate to violence anyway). They each drink an equal amount of laxative. The one who goes the longest without setting foot in the bathroom is the champion.
QuoteSwansong? Do you mean you're leaving?
Nope, but im having a hiatus from writing of undetermined lenght.
QuoteThat's a nice picture. I like how it has no overt signs of poop, gas, or desperation. You let the 3 items by her bed tell the story. Clever
The final version will most likely have a revealing gas cloud emerging to signal the start of the fireworks, hence why her skirt is flying up. 8)
Panel 2 in a day or two.
Glad to hear you're not disappearing for all time. What do you think of my story elements?
They're good, especially the scientiffic study one. I could see a lot of funny, scary and smelly situations arise ^-^
Panel 2, by now she's lettig off world record farts and realizing she better get to the toilet asap..
(http://img691.imageshack.us/img691/3603/sakurahugefarts.png)
As this is still a work in progress im open to suggestions for thoughts/dialogue, facial experssions etc, the only thing set in stone so to speak is the poses and perspectives. Don't be shy!
:-X O....M...G *pokes sakura's butt* feels like a baby's :kawaii:
Meh, not much interest I take :-X
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Quote from: yarr on February 23, 2011, 08:03:16 AM
They're good, especially the scientiffic study one. I could see a lot of funny, scary and smelly situations arise ^-^
So are you gonna make a comic out of it?
Quote from: yarr on February 25, 2011, 09:15:08 AM
Meh, not much interest I take :-X
(http://img717.imageshack.us/img717/782/sakuradonk.jpg)
Oh, there's interest. I laughed when I saw the filename btw, it's apt. That is some crazy donk right there.
(my favorite kind)
Quote from: Jimmy Olsen on February 26, 2011, 04:48:42 AMSo are you gonna make a comic out of it?
I think not, after this ongoing project I'll be lying pretty low save for maybe a story every odd decade :-[
Quote from: BlueSniper on February 26, 2011, 03:27:38 PMThat is some crazy donk right there.
Wait til you see what it can do :)
3rd panel, en route to the bathroom she needs to pull her panties from the canyon to avoid revealing stains due to groundhogging. This dont look good for the poor toilet..
(http://img263.imageshack.us/img263/3267/groundhogw.png)
:-X oooooh.. she is like
" :'( can't hold it!" ^-^ nyuck Nyuck Nyuck
As they say, MOAR.
For those considering to chip in on the story/dialogue it can be a solo run with just Sakura, or play out as a shared experience with a second person observing\assisting her through extra speech bubbles. Though she will be the single person appearing in the drawings.
*Deep presenter voice*
The action starts in the next panel as her behind will finally meet mr. Toilet. What will these following three contributors make her do to him?
(http://img838.imageshack.us/img838/8146/doomngloom.png)
Find out tomorrow... :-X
PRUNE JUICE! ooooh hell.. she is going shit a big duck *Nyuck Nyuck Nyuck*
Part 4. Just immagine a symphony of massive farts and splashes as she spreads her behind for the onslaught on the poor toilet.
Is this the end? Most definitely not, this is not a simple "sit push flush n leave"dump :o
(http://img263.imageshack.us/img263/7646/hipseatingtoilet.png)
When you posted "feel free to suggest dialogue/story elements" I thought you were asking for plot suggestions. That's why I posted those.
Heh, I meant suggestions for dialogue etc for this little comic we got going here. Maybe I wasnt clear enough :-X
This looks delightful! As for suggestions... I thinks she should rub and massage her stomach a lot trying to force the huge movement out faster while commenting at the sensations under her fingers "Its like I ate a live snake... it wants out but its too big... jeeze and this gas is just insane, I feel like I'm shitting air bubbles the size of my fist"
Or include someone else to do the massaging for her since massaging yourself is usually a rather awkward and ineffective massage.
I like the idea of her feeling the mass & gas moving about inside her as she pushes it out. There's a panel with stomach holding later on, I think I'll use your idea for the final version 8)
Thanks!
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Page 1 is now done, before Sakura continue with the bathroom bombing lets get some suggestions in.
There's 3 ways I can think of approaching the story part of the comic; one is just doing whatever she think/says like a normal comic, the other is adding in an invisble co-character that observes and speaks with her, this would be pretty easy as it would just mean extra speech bubbles. The third way could be instead of speech/thoughts there would just be text as if told from a third person perspective.
The reason I'm nagging about participation is that I think a multiple headed troll is better coming up with the story to accompany the pictures then a single headed one,
and in addition I want to wring some activity out of this community, its pretty stagnant at the moment and with luck we can even deflower some of the many lurkers here as well.
Plus, I enjoy keeping you all in suspense :008:
Er, I can't seem to view the full-sized version.
That's cause I did not post the fullscreen one, its not finished.
"adding in an invisble co-character that observes and speaks with her,"
That would be neat so long as the dialogue wasn't creepy. I've seen that kind of thing done before in pictures on DA and it tends to come off creepy somehow. Maybe it would help if the invisible character was a lover or something to the other character instead of just a perv in the room with her
I had in mind a friend or something like that, but knock yourself if you wanna have a go, only limit is fantasy
(http://img109.imageshack.us/img109/9940/nanakogas.png)
:-X XD gee yarr, thats funny. funny picture
Imageshack says they deleted the image due to terms of service violation.
Can you upload it somewhere else? I really want to see it.
Yarr, I know you are out there!
Please find somewhere to re-upload that image. I really want to see it!
The missing pic was just of Sakuras face, nothing interesting.
Quote from: yarr on February 26, 2011, 10:00:58 PM
For those considering to chip in on the story/dialogue it can be a solo run with just Sakura, or play out as a shared experience with a second person observing\assisting her through extra speech bubbles. Though she will be the single person appearing in the drawings.
*Deep presenter voice*
The action starts in the next panel as her behind will finally meet mr. Toilet. What will these following three contributors make her do to him?
(http://img838.imageshack.us/img838/8146/doomngloom.png)
Find out tomorrow... :-X
Sorry to bring back an old thread, but this comic strip seemed promising and I was just wondering if its still on the drawing board. I'm guessing it is since I haven't seen any finished work on S2X's gallery, but I figured it couldn't hurt to ask.
I'ts dead. I was trying to get some community interest stirred up and do something based on that input, but there was not much interest generated so it kinda died.. don't think the sketches etc. are still around so doubt it will be finished, it got around 1/5th done or so.
I kinda lost interest myself too so :009: