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Title: Chapter 1-A Chance Meeting Reviewer: Poowrite Signed
Well, what's there is pretty good. It's just... there isn't much there :). I'm interested in reading more, though. I hope you add on to this.

Author's Response: Alright, made the chapter longer
Date: Jun 01, 2014 04:24 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1-A Chance Meeting Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Really needs some work. For one, if you want the characters to meet up, you should have that happen in the first chapter, that way, the readers have a better starting point. Doing it short like this makes it feel more like something that would be better off in the interactive stories section.



Author's Response: Alright, thanks guys, I'll do just that
Date: Jun 01, 2014 01:01 pm [Report This]
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