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Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: jasonb Signed
5 out of 5
Date: Jun 24, 2011 01:09 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: kira Signed

Nice story

Date: Dec 20, 2009 08:02 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Yusuke89 Signed

For once, Toph got her ass handed to her  by Katara utterly in your fics. Nice change of pattern.

 

Though I'm smelling a sequel to this story......

Still great though. ^_^

Date: May 03, 2008 10:24 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: yoshion7 Signed
Nice it would of been better I can see  where this could end up in a contest betweent teh two when toph gets her back and the both find out they like it
Date: Apr 29, 2008 08:32 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: MMTwo Signed
I liked the story, especially using the avatar characters in this way.

Only thing that would have made it any better for me is more on the accident at the end, but I'm an accident guy.

Good work!
Date: Apr 28, 2008 12:47 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Very nice, always nice to see another Avatar story. I gotta try my hand at one eventually. I can see this probably becoming a long series (if you pay careful attention to the time between entries and the remaining time you mentioned in between the episodes).

I will point out there are the usual spelling errors, but nothing really serious. I certainly think you did pretty well in having Toph remain fairly strong in her attempt to not mess. Though I wonder if she'd be all that bothered with poopy pants once it's all over, she does seem to have a penchant for being dirty.

Date: Apr 28, 2008 12:19 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Poowrite Signed
Overall great work. I though you nailed the characters . They were believable, even in a competition they likely would never actually be in.

I wish the actual accident had gotten a little more attention, but the desperation was excellent.

As always, thanks for sharing.

Author's Response:

I'm glad you enjoyed it ^_^

I admit, Toph actual loss could've had more attention though 

Date: Apr 27, 2008 05:34 pm [Report This]
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