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Title: Chapter 1: The madness begins Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

This is terribly short, and feels a quite rushed. It should a little more drawn so the tention and setting really sinks in.

 

Also, the title could be shorter: just "Alfred's Interrogation" or something like that.



Author's Response: I knew I should of gone with that title
Date: Nov 12, 2012 05:36 pm [Report This]
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