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Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: MrMoow Signed
Put simply, it needs a lot of work. Sentence structure and fluency, grammar, word choice, and descriptive language all need to be improved.

Author's Response: Thank you I appreciate a honest response
Date: Dec 26, 2014 03:30 pm [Report This]
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