actually, EFROdian, i wrote a story like that on the Animegirldesp. She does that to all 3 of them. Read part2 though, part 1 sucks
and Animelover, PLZ write a story about Azula's PEE desperation. PLZ?
Nice story
For once, Toph got her ass handed to her by Katara utterly in your fics. Nice change of pattern.
Though I'm smelling a sequel to this story......
Still great though. ^_^
I see. I'm glad it's that because it looked hot that way.^_^
I assume Katara was looking at Toph from behind her.
Author's Response: Katara was never actually directly behind Toph, before Toph discovered her, Katara was behind Toph and to her left. and when Toph knocked Katara forward, Katara slid up to Toph's left side.
Garret, you once again demonstrated your talent at making something as gross as shit and flatulence sexually erotic. It was especially hot when Katare looked at the nude Toph taking a dump and actually seeing her shit coming out of her ass.
One question though, was Toph squatting with legs apart like a " horse stance" or was she simply squated by crouching
Author's Response:
I'm glad you liked it.
Toph was squatting with her legs apart
Only thing that would have made it any better for me is more on the accident at the end, but I'm an accident guy.
Good work!
Very nice, always nice to see another Avatar story. I gotta try my hand at one eventually. I can see this probably becoming a long series (if you pay careful attention to the time between entries and the remaining time you mentioned in between the episodes).
I will point out there are the usual spelling errors, but nothing really serious. I certainly think you did pretty well in having Toph remain fairly strong in her attempt to not mess. Though I wonder if she'd be all that bothered with poopy pants once it's all over, she does seem to have a penchant for being dirty.
I wish the actual accident had gotten a little more attention, but the desperation was excellent.
As always, thanks for sharing.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you enjoyed it ^_^
I admit, Toph actual loss could've had more attention though
Author's Response: Thanks, I\'m glad you liked it, my next fic in this series will most likely occur in the season 3 timeline
Very nice, it didn't stray too far from the real show (somehow I wouldn't put 'that' past Toph :P) And it was pretty cool with the implied pooping (I think my bending poop comment from way back has created a trend XP).
Good luck with this, can't wait to see more stories in the contest.
Author's Response: Thanks, It occurred to me that there was a month time period of no story, so I figured it would be a perfect time frame to do a fic on ^_^
Aside from that I really liked it. I think that the characters reacted according to their personalities, Toph especially. The dialog was accurate and the idea of Katara bending her pee out of her was pretty interesting. That's a tirck she could maybe use on Azula and her lackeys in the future.
In all good work, keep it up :).
About the first half, any fic I do, I try to include sexual acts, ether accept that when you read my fics, or don't read them.
This is pretty good for a brief, funny story, but I see problems with it. The most obvious is that it jumps back and forth between past and present tense. Another problem is that I find it hard to believe that, in the space of time that Toph is in the bathroom, Katara's need to pee goes from the first twinge to being so bad that she, a high school-aged girl, uncontrollably wets herself. I can't imagine that taking any less than 2 hours, unless Katara drank tons and tons of liquid for some reason. I think you should have done 1 of the following:
A. Make Katara have to pee at the beginning, but ignore it until Toph goes to the bathroom, since she knows Toph will be in there forever.
B. Have Toph stay in the bathroom for a *very* long time.
C. Provide some reason for Katara having lots of liquid in her system.
Moving to the positive attributes, I love the "I gotta go move some earth."/"I really didn't need to know that" part. I also like the bending part, especially her "pulling" it out of her bladder, hurting herself, but I wish that part was longer. I also wish you hadn't written in the part with Toph playing with herself and Katara getting excited from it, since I never like reading about that stuff. The end is a real plus. *Not* seeing the scene with Katara throwing pee at Toph is probably even more fun than seeing it. I think you ended it at just the right time.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and your suggestions, I liked your (A) suggestion the most, can\'t believe I didn\'t think of it. >_