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Continue this pls! Capitalize on FE Fates hype!!!!!
Date: Jul 19, 2016 04:33 am [Report This]
Very fuuny, though i know very liitle of Fire Emblem besides wikipedia and Super SmaSH bROS bRAWL.
Date: Jan 03, 2011 08:14 pm [Report This]
Very fuuny, though i know very liitle of Fire Emblem besides wikipedia and Super SmaSH bROS bRAWL.
Date: Jan 03, 2011 08:14 pm [Report This]
One of my new favorites on this site. I loved everything about it.
The background was a nice touch, especially for someone like me who is largely unfamiliar with the series. I felt like I got to know Amelia in a way I don't usually get to know a character in these stories.
The battles were exciting and believable. Remove the pooping, and this fic stands on it's own as a good short story.
Though it only made up a small part of the story, the desperation and accident were top-notch. Just what I've come to expect from you.
Overall, wonderful job. Here's looking forward to your next tale.
The background was a nice touch, especially for someone like me who is largely unfamiliar with the series. I felt like I got to know Amelia in a way I don't usually get to know a character in these stories.
The battles were exciting and believable. Remove the pooping, and this fic stands on it's own as a good short story.
Though it only made up a small part of the story, the desperation and accident were top-notch. Just what I've come to expect from you.
Overall, wonderful job. Here's looking forward to your next tale.
Date: Sep 08, 2009 12:11 am [Report This]
most enjoyable delicacy ive read since trunks' trick. thanks for the entertainment and hope to see more from you of this genre of pantypoop or "amorpoop"!
Date: Sep 03, 2009 05:25 pm [Report This]
I have to agree with Jimmy here, and say that, while this story was well written and accurate to the game, it wasn't "enjoyable" in that special kind of way that we love on this site.
Unlike him, I really did enjoy the descriptions before it, and I felt that I could read about Fire Emblem's background and plot for hours before getting bored, at least with your writing style.
However, when the pooping scene came, it didn't "turn me on" as stories like this usually do. I don't know why, but it seems that not enough buildup and description were given to the accident itself and to the time surrounding it. I would have wanted there to be more in that vein rather than in the backstory.
Also, a story about Eirika? :D
Unlike him, I really did enjoy the descriptions before it, and I felt that I could read about Fire Emblem's background and plot for hours before getting bored, at least with your writing style.
However, when the pooping scene came, it didn't "turn me on" as stories like this usually do. I don't know why, but it seems that not enough buildup and description were given to the accident itself and to the time surrounding it. I would have wanted there to be more in that vein rather than in the backstory.
Also, a story about Eirika? :D
Date: Sep 03, 2009 04:02 pm [Report This]
I've been looking forward to this for a long time, and I encouraged you to write it, so I feel bad having to give it a negative review. The descriptions of the armor and the process of becoming a knight are detailed, and seem realistic, but I got bored with them after a while. I don't know what I should say was wrong with them, they just seemed more like a lecture than entertainment. The fighting was more interesting, but still not what it could have been. Then, after all this drawn-out description, the messing scene seemed to fly by. I enjoyed it, but it wasn't all I was hoping for. You don't seem to take full advantage of the possibilities of an accident in metal armor. The tender scene that followed was nice, however.
I'm sorry to say this, but I don't think this is a very strong story. The most enjoyable part was an offhand mention of a different girl messing herself.
Author's Response: Hmmmm...now this is weird. I've always thought of you as a way more detail oriented writer than me, Jimmy. You usually include a lot of details about the setting in the story, and even said on the forums that you did research on the medieval period for "Rarely-Told Fairy Tales" series. Whereas I typically (in the past, anyway) rush through the description of characters and setting and get straight to the messing, which is usually as drawn out as possible. That's why in my last few stories I've been trying to include more substance as well as a lot of pooping, in response to criticism that my stories had good toilet scenes but not much else. I hope you can understand why I'm confused about your review. That doesn't mean that it isn't still valid, however. Perhaps I just overcompensated by including too much story and not enough messing.
I'm sorry to say this, but I don't think this is a very strong story. The most enjoyable part was an offhand mention of a different girl messing herself.
Author's Response: Hmmmm...now this is weird. I've always thought of you as a way more detail oriented writer than me, Jimmy. You usually include a lot of details about the setting in the story, and even said on the forums that you did research on the medieval period for "Rarely-Told Fairy Tales" series. Whereas I typically (in the past, anyway) rush through the description of characters and setting and get straight to the messing, which is usually as drawn out as possible. That's why in my last few stories I've been trying to include more substance as well as a lot of pooping, in response to criticism that my stories had good toilet scenes but not much else. I hope you can understand why I'm confused about your review. That doesn't mean that it isn't still valid, however. Perhaps I just overcompensated by including too much story and not enough messing.
Date: Sep 03, 2009 02:41 am [Report This]
Really good. Liked the battle scene, something that's only becoming a little more common in the stories here. Though I think the messing could be a lengthened a little, but that's just me.
Anyway, there are the usual spellilng errors and some missing quotations, otherwise it's pretty airtight. Glad to see another great story from you!
Date: Sep 03, 2009 12:16 am [Report This]
I Have to say I greatly enjoyed reading this story not only did you capture fire emblem perfectly but the charecters I thought were quite drawn out.
Can we expect Seth to tell the whole story of Erika or is a single shot?
Author's Response: Well, I threw that in there thinking that maybe I could make it into another story, maybe not...but if you's read it, I'd love to write a story about Eirika having an accident. She's a really cool character too. Actually, what am I saying, it's Fire Emblem! They're all cool characters!
Date: Sep 02, 2009 09:50 pm [Report This]
Great story, believeable characters...you're really good at this writing thing, you know?
Bonus points for the off hand reference to a tough girl soiling herself from fright.
Date: Sep 02, 2009 09:13 pm [Report This]
What can I say, yer a master of the pen. Short, to the point and a lot of fun to read.
I can't really think of anything else to say about it. It was a quick, fun read. Good work.
I can't really think of anything else to say about it. It was a quick, fun read. Good work.
Date: Mar 09, 2009 08:07 pm [Report This]
I've never played Fire Emblem (or even head of it outside of this site), and I still love this story. Watching a girl take a dump in an outhouse has always been a fantasy of mine and the fact that she was so happy to let a guy watch makes it even better for me. The idea of an eccentric genius girl getting obsessed with her bodily functions is something I would never have thought of but it's a great concept for a story. I love the way she's studied what foods give her different consistences of poop and how she describes it so well. (If only real girls could be more like that...) Funny how Lute doesn't even notice that she would probably have been killed if she was a little taller and not hunched over her book, I guess that's part of her weird personality.
Date: Mar 08, 2009 09:51 pm [Report This]
Hehe, I've never played Fire Emblem or know of it's characters but that was pretty darn good and funny! ^_^ I liked that Lute described the consistancy of her poop
Date: Mar 04, 2009 06:54 am [Report This]
Awesome! As always you never fail to make an exciting story about defecation.
My only criticism would have to be a few spelling errors (the guy's thinking should be in italic or something to distinguish it better) and it might have worked to have given more description to the two characters for people who might not know what they look like. Also, I think it's odd that the guy freaked out when the fireball entered outhouse, then just seemed confused when she's exposed to the world.
Overall, a great new story. Glad to see another author getting back into the game.
Date: Mar 03, 2009 12:31 am [Report This]
This is the most enjoyable story I've read here in a while. Short, but sweet!
I thought it was refreshing to have a male main character. In most of the fics on this site the women get 99% of the attention of the narrative and the men are treated like excess baggage.
The outhouse ambush was clever and entertaining, although I have to wonder why the toilet paper wasn't destroyed with the walls. And after that's over, you give us the wonderful mental image of a chick using an outhouse with no walls while nonchalantly chatting with a guy nearby.
And the entertainment Lute provides goes way beyond her bodily function. You gave her a lot of great lines.
Besides the toilet paper error (maybe not really an error) I can't think of anything to criticize about this. It only had 1 spelling mistake that I noticed, which is a lot less than usual. Great job, and I hope to read more from you soon!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I've fixed some of the things that you and Orpheum mentioned. Also, as this is the first in a series based on the support conversation mechanic in the Fire Emblem series, it's going to focus mostly on male/female couples from the games that I found particularly interesting. So upcoming editions should also feature male characters that I'm actually interested in writing about.
I thought it was refreshing to have a male main character. In most of the fics on this site the women get 99% of the attention of the narrative and the men are treated like excess baggage.
The outhouse ambush was clever and entertaining, although I have to wonder why the toilet paper wasn't destroyed with the walls. And after that's over, you give us the wonderful mental image of a chick using an outhouse with no walls while nonchalantly chatting with a guy nearby.
And the entertainment Lute provides goes way beyond her bodily function. You gave her a lot of great lines.
Besides the toilet paper error (maybe not really an error) I can't think of anything to criticize about this. It only had 1 spelling mistake that I noticed, which is a lot less than usual. Great job, and I hope to read more from you soon!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I've fixed some of the things that you and Orpheum mentioned. Also, as this is the first in a series based on the support conversation mechanic in the Fire Emblem series, it's going to focus mostly on male/female couples from the games that I found particularly interesting. So upcoming editions should also feature male characters that I'm actually interested in writing about.
Date: Mar 02, 2009 10:37 pm [Report This]
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