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Title: Sextra Terrestrials: The Geelien's Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Pretty nice. While I admit some parts of the series don't always appeal to me, it's still amazing how long and winding the whole thing is. And certainly, it's fun to think of the things you can have the goo-girl do, like unbirthing/being birthed by one of the girls, helping them shit, etc.

Nice to see you back in action here.
 

Date: Mar 15, 2016 02:49 am [Report This]
Title: Sextra Terrestrials: The Geelien's Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Hmm, pantyegging? Never thought I'd see that. Then again, you don't usually see girls laying eggs in their pants, lol



Author's Response:

Well there was a similar scene VERY early in the series, back in season 1.

But it's nice to see you continuing to read this series, i hope you enjoy the upcoming chapters if you read them 

Date: Nov 12, 2013 06:28 pm [Report This]
Title: Sextra Terrestrials: The Geelien's Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Definitely an interesting series. While I'm not much for most of the content, it's still a cool diversion from the norm. Always nice to see some egg laying.



Author's Response:

glad you find it interesting. WHile the series as a whole started out as Egg-laying being the main theme, it started dropping off in the second 'season' of the series.

If you decide to continue reading this partiular story in the series, I hope you still find it interesting, or maybe even take a liking to Celine. ^_^ 

Date: Aug 22, 2013 02:02 am [Report This]
Title: The Popular Girl N Reviewer: lizzy10101 Signed
Very good you should continue!
Date: Nov 18, 2012 06:17 am [Report This]
Title: The Popular Girl N Reviewer: TUSF Signed
I've followed your story sense i first discovered them on palcomix.. It's sad, but nice, to see a good story end well. Though, I do hope you continue to bring to life the universe of Merkolova to life, and show other aspects of it. perhaps even haveing a series of a popular guy, from Earth, who's coming to Merkolova as one of the first HUMAN students... it would be an interesting project.. if you want, you can add my e-mail, and we can discuss it.. ragef33@gmail.com

Author's Response:

I'm glad you like the series.

although the idea of a 'populer guy' story is good, I can confidently say i have no interest in such a story, someone else could do it though, I've let someone on Deviant Hearts have a go at series based on my series

Date: Jun 22, 2011 07:17 pm [Report This]
Title: Sextra Terrestrials: Nex Introduction Reviewer: EagleWing Signed
Very interesting concept, i like the details that you used describing the race.
Date: Jun 05, 2011 11:06 pm [Report This]
Title: The Popular Girl N Reviewer: Atomik Signed
great story!!! looking forward to more work from you!!

Author's Response: glad you like it, I've been currently working on the next chapter, it's current length being 17 pages and i still have more to go. I might split the chapter in two though, i'm not sure
Date: Dec 02, 2009 05:54 pm [Report This]
Title: The Popular Girl Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed
Not a bad end. I can only wonder what would happen if this were to continue, but I can bet you're dying to move onto something new and different.

Author's Response:

I actually have an idea of a possible Alma Plotline if I was ever to continue the series.

I don't really have any plans for anything new though 

Date: Oct 26, 2009 08:44 pm [Report This]
Title: The Fantasy World of Merkolova Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed
While loli-ish stuff isn't quite my thing (stands in front of picture of Sora, Kari, and other digimon girls) I do enjoy a good egg laying story. I actually spoke with good ol' Arthur Saxon and he said he's been planning on a egg laying story of sorts. That'd be pretty cool to see.
Date: Feb 26, 2009 11:32 pm [Report This]
Title: The Popular Girl Reviewer: Jimmy Olsen Signed
This is a nice little desperation/wetting story, although I don't know much about the surrounding plot. I read about half of the next chapter too because I was curious about how things turned out, but I stopped reading after the sapphic stuff got heavy.

This story does something not many wetting stories do. Sakura wets her panties bit by bit as she runs to a toilet. Usually characters wet all at once, or mostly at once, giving up and letting loose after having leaked too much. That gradual wetting was a nice departure from the norm, although it seems unlikely that she'd be able to get dry enough that people wouldn't notice that she'd had an accident. I also like the idea of Sakura risking wetting herself in order to be a good student.

You describe her desperation and wetting well. Here's my favorite part: "It was taking everything she had to avoid slamming her hands against her crotch and squirming on the spot in front of everyone when Lila released her hand. Instead, she settled for fiddling with her fingers in front of her crotch and an up and down bouncing of her right foot as Lila spoke to the teacher..." Sakura's forlorn gazes back to the bathroom as they walk to the homeroom are also a funny and cute detail. Another random act of cuteness is the scene at the beginning where Reni is being all girlish and Jillian is being unenthused (but why is a boy named "Jillian?").

The only thing that really bothers me about this chapter is the shifting tenses. I find that very distracting and I don't understand why it's so common in so many people's writing.

In short, you're very good at writing cute and compelling fiction with desperation and wetting. I would love to read more of this sort of thing by you if you would leave out the sexual things.

Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked this chapter. and don't worry, the EX series doesn't have much of a 'plot'

And as mentioned in the chapter you read, Sakura was notorious for being constantly late to class on Earth, so it only made sence that she'd want to start her first day in a new school on a new planet on the right foot, but her bladder had other things to say. Concidering Sakura's likes watersports though, it surprises me that there arn't many fics with her peeing.

About Jillian's name, It just sounded interesting to me and it sounded like it could be a boy's name IMO.

and unfortunatly, while I have done wetting fics without sexualizing the characters, Sex is one of the main reasons and things I like to do in fiction.

Date: Feb 21, 2009 01:40 am [Report This]
Title: The Popular Girl Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Nice ending, definately an interesting end to a long story, I can only hope my and Yarr's Sakura series will have a cool ending (even if it is pretty silly XP)

Maybe in a little while you could do a one-off '10 years later' bit where she makes a return to see her friends.



Author's Response:

heh, I look forward to the Sakura stories ^_^

lol about the '10 years later' thing, the chances of me doing that is pretty slim, but I still don't want to say good-bye to this series ^_^ I may do what I did with my 'Just a Shell'  series, do EX, or 'extra' chapters after the story is over. Afterall, with Sakura now having a sister and a solid relationship with Lila, I'm sure i could come up with stuff to right about ^_^ 

Date: Sep 20, 2008 11:07 pm [Report This]
Title: The Popular Girl Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed
Interesting, it's gonna be a very epic ending I presume.

Author's Response: Lol, I don't know if 'epic' would be the correct word, but it'll be a good ending ^_^
Date: Sep 19, 2008 10:06 pm [Report This]
Title: The Popular Girl Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Meh, it was ok. Though not much into the rape scene. But hey, it's your story after all (:P).

Can't wait to see more.

Date: Sep 13, 2008 11:48 pm [Report This]
Title: The Popular Girl Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed
Nice chapter, though I'm not much for the straight up hentai stuff, it's still nice.
Date: Sep 13, 2008 11:15 pm [Report This]
Title: The Popular Girl Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed
Another nice chapter, I can see things are kinda heading for a conclusion, though I can guess it's still a ways off.
Date: Aug 24, 2008 08:58 pm [Report This]
Title: The Popular Girl Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Another good one, as usual. I can see it's turning into quite the yuri series, with the egg bits coming and going *much like a doujin with occasional scat parts.*

Is there an ending in sight? Or will this just go on and on and on and on and on and on and on......(?)



Author's Response:

I'm glad you like it

and yes, this series WILL have an ending, I've even already thought of the ending.

The end is actually close, I hope for one more 'filler' chapter before the 'story' continues to its end, I predict, 3-4 more chapters in this series

Date: Aug 09, 2008 06:56 pm [Report This]
Title: The Popular Girl Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Nice, a quick little romp as I can see.

 

By the way, have you thought about entering the contest? I would hope so, it's kinda dull with just me and Poowrite at the moment :P



Author's Response:

And another to follow in the next chapter when I get started on it ^_^

About the contest, I concidered it, but I have trouble thinking of the victim to use

Date: Aug 06, 2008 12:13 am [Report This]
Title: The Popular Girl Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Damn, seem to the story is turning into one of those softcore/kinda hardcore hentais.

 

Still a great chapter. Keep it up.



Author's Response:

Yeah, I think the 'slice of life' angle is the best way to go.

Before I even began the fic, I intended to show at the end, Sara's friend that first found out her secret (to lazy to look up her name ^_^;) had a video proove of Ginger as an alien and giving the video to her dad to show one of his government friends, which would lead to people coming to Ginger's and Sara houses, and I'm sure you can guess how that would play out.

I really didn't want the series to play out that way, it didn't start the way, so it's not going to end that way.

Anyway, thx for reading ^_^

Date: Jun 19, 2008 02:22 am [Report This]
Title: The Popular Girl Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Poor sara... shouldn't have done that to her friend....

 

Oh well, next chapter!

Date: Jun 03, 2008 10:28 pm [Report This]
Title: The Popular Girl Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Hmmm, seems like the egg laying is taking a back seat for the 'loli sex', eh?

 

Stil a nice chapter, onto the next! *Rides away on horseback*

Date: Jun 03, 2008 10:22 pm [Report This]
Title: The Popular Girl Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Tripy.... really really really tripy.

 

*Is suddenly dressed in tye-dye shirt* Whoa man.

Date: Jun 03, 2008 10:12 pm [Report This]
Title: The Popular Girl Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Heh, gonna be an interesting bunch of twist and turns when the other hybrids come along I can gather.

 

Keep it coming.

Date: Jun 03, 2008 10:09 pm [Report This]
Title: The Popular Girl Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Interesting twist, though I would say it's not quite working for me. But still a nice way to explain the random egg laying then 'oh she just lays, because...' you see in some stories.

Keep up the great work.

Date: Jun 03, 2008 09:59 pm [Report This]
Title: The Popular Girl Reviewer: N Signed
Well, I'm not looking for a story with twists and turns... Well, except for the pr0n, I'd like to see you venture to some other areas there. Its getting a bit dry, same old honey thing. Maybe a bit about defecation in there? I can see how it would fit. Alien Shits XD

What I'm really looking to get out of this is an interesting and somewhat arousing story that has a clear plot and a sense of finality when I finish. That's all, and I know how hard that is to pull off. You're doing a great job so far! Keep it up!

Author's Response: I've actually been considering adding more than just egg-laying and the usual yuri sex
Date: May 29, 2008 09:55 pm [Report This]
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