Good stories. I especially liked the diarrhea chapter. What I dislike the most is the sex chapter. Of course, I shouldn't be judging that because I naturally don't like sex stuff at all (a good ol' dump does the job fine). Grammar is much better now but I think there are a few commas missing. Also, you should space the paragraphs out more. 4.5 stars!

Author's Response: Kinda wanted to do something new with the whole sex thing, there are A LOT of playable characters and i have 3 chapters for each of them, don't know what ill come up with, but it should be fun to write