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Title: Meiko's dump (Prison School) Reviewer: Hapwel Signed
I have one complaint about the work. I think you're pretty good but you're constantly providing exact measurements of length, width, and time. "Then she did this for 10 minutes. The poop was 10 cm wide." This is a weird, sterile way of writing, and it's distracting. I'd recommend studying some of the more prominent writers here, like yarr and orpheumzero, to get some reference. I think you have potential, and if this was toned down in your writing it would significantly improve. I hope this helps.
Date: Jul 29, 2017 06:27 pm [Report This]
Title: Meiko's dump (Prison School) Reviewer: kamadcyborg Signed
I love hyperscat stories
Date: Nov 26, 2016 05:09 pm [Report This]
Title: Meiko's dump (Prison School) Reviewer: cy14 Signed
You still have a long way to go in terms of writing, but this kind of story is exactly why i keep lurking around here. Thanks!
Date: Sep 12, 2016 07:06 pm [Report This]
Title: Meiko's dump (Prison School) Reviewer: MyndBlown Signed
Short. Slightly messed up grammar.

Author's Response: Sorry for the grammar.English is not my native language but I'm trying to improve.
Date: Sep 05, 2016 03:50 pm [Report This]
Title: Meiko's dump (Prison School) Reviewer: Khory122484mm Signed
I love this!!! You should make another one & maybe she has a girlfriend who likes to fart & shit too

Author's Response: Hi!Thanks for the review and the suggestion.I will definetly do another Prison School story and I really like your idea.Thanks for the read and the review.
Date: Aug 27, 2016 08:35 pm [Report This]
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