As was noted, there were some spelling errors. Also, you switched from past tense to present tense and back a few times. Not enough to take away from the story though!
And man, what a dump. You did a good job with that and the interaction between the characters was entertaining when it was there. Overall, very good! I liked it!
Author's Response: Thank you! I looked through and I did switch between tenses a lot. I updated it, now majority of the tenses are present.
Heh, never expected to see this challenge get done again after AnimeLover's FF crossover story from a ways back. Pretty good story overall, though I would say it could have maybe had a bit more buildup in the beginning, like Tifa having to shoo off some lingering barflies, maybe even with a few trying to flirt with her and get her attention while she's just focused on closing up and hitting the bathroom asap. Also, a few spellling errors, but nothing too serious;
Missing "her" when first mentioning her bladder and bowels. So she might as WELL go. Also, slided isn't a word, just slid. A few other words could probably be rephrased to make their tensing fit better. Other than that, this was a good, short read.
Author's Response: Wow, thank you for your review! I fixed those mistakes you mentioned, and it’s my fault for not seeing those before publishing. I’m glad you enjoyed it though.