Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Seele Signed
Awesome story can we get more Tifa and Cloud interactions
Date: Sep 21, 2019 05:11 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: EagleWing Signed
Nicely done
Date: Sep 13, 2019 09:08 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Poowrite Signed
Very entertaining! There were a few little details you added that I really loved, like Tifa pulling her hair out of the way before sitting on the toilet.

As was noted, there were some spelling errors. Also, you switched from past tense to present tense and back a few times. Not enough to take away from the story though!

And man, what a dump. You did a good job with that and the interaction between the characters was entertaining when it was there. Overall, very good! I liked it!

Author's Response: Thank you! I looked through and I did switch between tenses a lot. I updated it, now majority of the tenses are present.
Date: Aug 30, 2019 06:35 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Heh, never expected to see this challenge get done again after AnimeLover's FF crossover story from a ways back. Pretty good story overall, though I would say it could have maybe had a bit more buildup in the beginning, like Tifa having to shoo off some lingering barflies, maybe even with a few trying to flirt with her and get her attention while she's just focused on closing up and hitting the bathroom asap. Also, a few spellling errors, but nothing too serious;

Missing "her" when first mentioning her bladder and bowels. So she might as WELL go. Also, slided isn't a word, just slid. A few other words could probably be rephrased to make their tensing fit better. Other than that, this was a good, short read.



Author's Response: Wow, thank you for your review! I fixed those mistakes you mentioned, and it’s my fault for not seeing those before publishing. I’m glad you enjoyed it though.
Date: Aug 28, 2019 01:07 am [Report This]


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