I don't watch Code Lyoko, so I have no idea who these characters are, but that wasn't going to stop me from what I expected to be a gem from the great Orpheum! This story is really good! =)
Not too bad, it seemed like it was a bit rushed and the ending was kind of abrupt, but the description was good and the characters were accurate. Good job. Looking forward to more Code Lyoko fics!
Well don't forget, it is hard to try and utilize the male and female pronouns in a manner that doesn't muddle things but at the same time satifies whatever quirks the writer has (I don't prefer males going).
But I hear what you're saying, I will probably do some revisions in time, but for now I'll leave to be judged (and it's doing quite well it seems :D) and once the contest is over I'll tidy it up better.
I love simple, believable stories like this one where you can feel like they happened "off camera" in a the show. The writers of that episode can't have expected us to believe that he/she never had to use the bathroom in all that time...
Of course, those two sharing bodies for at least a day and a half if I recall. Granted we don't know if Yumi is a big dumper ;) But then again, most people who train hard and stay fit are likely to be so, given they have to eat in considerable quantity to keep a steady stamina.
Then there's also the fact that I believe I all Japanese girls are programed to shit enormously XD
Nice one as usual.
Sorry, if i said this but the pooping act doesn't show an 'Orpheum's standard' I mean, a lot of grunting and straining and of course one final big bomb.
Sorry, if I wrote something wrong. Still, it's a good story!
Author's Response: Well it wasn't easy trying to figure out how to make it work without being forced into using 'his' 'him' and other pronouns like that. But then again, even when someone goes, most oral noises vary from how well a person can take it. So I just played that Odd wasn't too bothered, since I realy can't stand the idea of a guy going, even if he is in a chick's body.
It's good to see an entry for the contest. This one is a tough cookie to crack and I think you did a swell job.
Thanks, I'm surprised at myself for whipping it so quickly (only took about 30 or so minutes). Good to see the style was easy to follow.
Can't wait to see what you got in store. That one idea you had on the forums should probably work fine.