Hah! The ending was funny!
Overall a very good fic, though, personally, I would've loved it if the pressures of the girls' hands had done in their bladder controls first, but meh.. you can't have everything, they always say.
It was such a good experience to read a mostly grammatically correct fic (just a couple of typos that I saw) and YAY! For the first time, I didn't read a "there/their/they're" error. THIS is the type of grammatically correct fic I'd love to see more often. =)
(Now where's MY e-cookie? :P )
Author's Response: Well, if I had made them pee first, they\'d have peed all over each other\'s hands and that wouldn\'t have been very sexy :P. So, I opted for this apprach, which was still WAY different than what I had originally thought of doing.rnrnAnd, for the record, my stories contain no typos, just new ways of writing old words :).rnrnThanks fer the review!