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Title: Yumi's shame Reviewer: DrBones Signed
I was really happy to see that you chose to tweak/clean up/update this one as it's one of my favorite "lost episodes".

When I was reading the new lines near the middle, I was thinking how it sounded familiar for some reason and when I want back to check the reviews, it was all the stuff I had suggested! It's so cool that you incorporated everything I said and more. I'm not sure if those lines adds a lot to the story itself, but I sure enjoyed reading them from a "fetish" perspective.

Author's Response:

If anything, it's definately a more defined version of the "episode". Everything at least feels more involved and detailed and flows better than previously. Anyway, thanks for the review, glad you enjoyed it. ^__^

 

Now please get on that Integra story you've been teasing us with for son long! @__@

Date: Dec 15, 2010 10:43 pm [Report This]
Title: Yumi's shame Reviewer: EFROdian Signed
Ah yes, a flawless recap of the lost Code Lyoko episode entitled "In Hot Water" (or was it "Steamed"? It seems I need to be reminded).  Absoultely, brilliant!  I felt like I was really watching an episode of Code Lyoko that wasn't shown to the general public.  Please make another one!  It seems you have a talent for Code Lyoko fics, and its obvious you've got the character's mannerisms, speech habits, and personalities down pat.  I'm surprised that Xana never tried to "delay" Aelita or Jeremie (well, for this forum's sake Yumi) when he activated a tower.  I mean, towards the end of the show, he's powerful enough to control tons of people at once, why couldn't he at least cvontrol the bodily functions of one, say Aelita, and Yumi.  Heck, Aelita's the one who's needed to deactivate a tower, what happens if she's "preoccupied"?  Seems like an interesting little dilemma to me.  Anyway, I know this is long, but at least think this idea's over.  I've pitched it to Poowrite already, but I wanted to see what you had to say about it too.  There's a bunch of different directions you could go with it. Think abou it.  And keep up the good work! 

Author's Response:

It's a nice idea, but it'd depend on where the story takes place. Don't forget, XANA couldn't control Yumi, Odd or Ulrich because they had already been to Lyoko and thus became immune to possession. Aelita was only able to be controled through direct contact via the squid, and Jeremie became immune after scanning himself once more in the second season.


But nothing says that XANA couldn't 'make' someone spike Aelita's food. I'll certainly have to think about it, since I want to actually see the remaining episodes of Code Lyoko. Though I don't know when they'll return since they stopped in halfway in the US but already ended in France.

Date: Feb 09, 2008 01:51 am [Report This]
Title: Yumi's shame Reviewer: DrBones Signed
Nice one. I could visualize everything perfectly and the characters where exactly right. I have a prefect mental picture of Sissy's face at the end and I imagined them in the old fashioned three-stall bathroom from the “Ulrich's Journal” episode. I like the format of having the “money shot” scenes at the beginning and end with the main story in the middle. The attack scenario was very clever as it fits the formula but is still original. If your goal was to create a real “lost episode” that was totally believable, then you succeeded 100%.

I really like this blackmail type of plot and find it really underused in these stories, ( I know Poowrite has one going that may get into these elements.) This would work very nicely in a real episode and I still don't understand why we can't see this type of plot, if not in American cartoons, at least in some anime. These shows try to keep their subplots relevant to their audience and I imagine most teenage girls have had issues with blackmail or privacy in public bathrooms.

I do have to add the eternal and universal “It should be longer!” comment. I would have liked to have heard exactly how Yumi described the incident to her friends and some of the comments thrown at her in the lunch room. (Girl throws a wad of toilet paper at Yumi, “Be sure to wipe! You stink!” etc.) For myself, I would have liked to have seen Ulrich get a peek at the vid. and seen his reaction.

I too hope for more of these as I dearly love natural and believable stories just as much as totally gratuitous huge mega-dumps.

Author's Response:

Thanks, I do strive for even greater greatness. (<--- full of himself much? :P) I know what story of Poowrite's you're talking about, WE all hope to see more of that little story soon.

As for the length, I thought it was long enough, but then again it all depends. I probably will go back some day and make a few tweaks. But it probably won't be as drastic as the changes I did for the two FFX stories.

Date: Jan 27, 2008 02:35 pm [Report This]
Title: Yumi's shame Reviewer: N Signed
Excellent! I could visualize it just like it was the show. You have all the mannerisms nailed!

Good story.

Author's Response: Thanks. I felt it was high time for more fics that felt like an episode and not just our favorite game/anime babes in a softcore fetish situation (though that's not necessarily a bad thing :P).
Date: Jan 24, 2008 11:01 am [Report This]
Title: Yumi's shame Reviewer: Anime Lover Signed
That was quite entertaining, very similar to the layout of the actual show

Author's Response: Twas nothing. It's actually quite easy to make a 'lost episode' if you will, all you have to do is just remember the exact way each character works and you can make a whole new season if you wanted.
Date: Jan 24, 2008 02:45 am [Report This]
Title: Yumi's shame Reviewer: Poowrite Signed
Very good. Well described pooping scenes and a happy ending. I liked this one very much :)

I liked that it went beyond the toilet, too, and had a bit of a story. It felt like watching an episode of Code: Lyoko, juding from my limited experience with the show.

Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response:

Well of course, it's nice to have a little plot along with all the pooping and farting. Besides, if you could make a Dragon Ball fic that wasn't just about Videl laying a bomb, I figured we could use a CL fic that wasn't just about Yumi or Aelita taking a dump. ;)

 

Hopefully we'll get more stories like this.

Date: Jan 24, 2008 01:30 am [Report This]
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