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Title: Aelita and Yumi, a lesson in using the toilet Reviewer: OtakuFreak141 Signed
A very intersting concept that if you know what Code Lyoko is and think about the reality of Aelita's arrival to Earth, it's really quite understandable where this story leads. Although it can get a bit graphic at times, but that's to be expected with something like this.

Author's Response: Well it'd be foolish to expect something non-graphic on this site, given it's main goal. But at least it's a natural grapchi, nothing gorey or truly mind numbing. Thanks for the review, glad you enjoyed it. Before the major reveal of season 2, this does tie in nicely with Aelita slowly (re)learning about how to live on earth.
Date: Jan 12, 2012 08:40 pm [Report This]
Title: Aelita and Yumi, a lesson in using the toilet Reviewer: EagleWing Signed

This is another great piece of work Zero, as an author i am impressed with this. Although i don't know much about Code Lyoko, reading this was a joy. Keep up the good work

E. W. 

Date: Jun 05, 2011 04:43 pm [Report This]
Title: Aelita and Yumi, a lesson in using the toilet Reviewer: NoMarcy Signed
Nice Job, this shows pretty good knowledge on the show as well.
Date: Dec 21, 2010 04:22 am [Report This]
Title: Aelita and Yumi, a lesson in using the toilet Reviewer: Yusuke89 Signed

I see. Good luck with the writing career!

Date: May 07, 2008 01:54 am [Report This]
Title: Aelita and Yumi, a lesson in using the toilet Reviewer: Yusuke89 Signed

Thia story is hot and I really enjoyed it! not only was it erotic but it was well-written as well. Ever thought about a career in pornographic literature? =p

 

One question though: How can Aelita see Yumi's shit coming out of her ass if Yumi is sitting on the toilet? Wouldn't is be kinda hard to see from where Aelita is sitting on the tub?



Author's Response:

Not terribly sure. it'd be an interesting thing to do, but I don't think it'd work if I plan on doing mainstream work, at least not without backlash from uppity parents who'd bitch about a writer doing adult works alongside regular novels and comics. But at least these stories do allow for some good practice at doing darker *and non-sexual* themes in stories I plan on writing.

As for the watching part, I'm pretty sure I see that Aelita is sitting opposite Yumi whose also got her legs spread. It's not too hard to see when a girl is sitting like that *at least a lot of the stories on Toilestool seem to make it sound easy enough to see :P*

Date: May 07, 2008 01:05 am [Report This]
Title: Aelita and Yumi, a lesson in using the toilet Reviewer: EFROdian Signed
YES!  Finally a fic about Aelita (this one has been begging to be done ever since Aelita came to Earth).  I thought they might actually hint at something like this (like in the episode where Sissi tricks Aelita into going into the boy's lockeroom),  I could definitely see Sissi tricking Aelita into something involving the toilet, like going into the men's room, or something, and then the gang would have to "teach Sissi a fitting lesson" via laxatives.  Would you be willing to make a story about that kind of thing, if possible?  Just a suggestion.  Keep up the great fics!

Author's Response:

Perhaps, it would certainly mean yet another nice episode to the expanded universe of my story (I hope you've read the sequels by Poowrite and Anime Lover). Though right now I'm plotting out a sequel involving Yumi, a pretty big dump, and Sissi with a camera, plus a dash of internet hijinks (I think you can figure out where I'm going :D). I'll think about this idea though too, it's definately worth trying.

Thanks for the review, now go check out Poowrite's sequel and Anime Lover's follow-up as well :)

Date: Oct 16, 2007 04:12 am [Report This]
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