Author's Response: Well it'd be foolish to expect something non-graphic on this site, given it's main goal. But at least it's a natural grapchi, nothing gorey or truly mind numbing. Thanks for the review, glad you enjoyed it. Before the major reveal of season 2, this does tie in nicely with Aelita slowly (re)learning about how to live on earth.
This is another great piece of work Zero, as an author i am impressed with this. Although i don't know much about Code Lyoko, reading this was a joy. Keep up the good work
I see. Good luck with the writing career!
Thia story is hot and I really enjoyed it! not only was it erotic but it was well-written as well. Ever thought about a career in pornographic literature? =p
One question though: How can Aelita see Yumi's shit coming out of her ass if Yumi is sitting on the toilet? Wouldn't is be kinda hard to see from where Aelita is sitting on the tub?
Not terribly sure. it'd be an interesting thing to do, but I don't think it'd work if I plan on doing mainstream work, at least not without backlash from uppity parents who'd bitch about a writer doing adult works alongside regular novels and comics. But at least these stories do allow for some good practice at doing darker *and non-sexual* themes in stories I plan on writing.
As for the watching part, I'm pretty sure I see that Aelita is sitting opposite Yumi whose also got her legs spread. It's not too hard to see when a girl is sitting like that *at least a lot of the stories on Toilestool seem to make it sound easy enough to see :P*
Perhaps, it would certainly mean yet another nice episode to the expanded universe of my story (I hope you've read the sequels by Poowrite and Anime Lover). Though right now I'm plotting out a sequel involving Yumi, a pretty big dump, and Sissi with a camera, plus a dash of internet hijinks (I think you can figure out where I'm going :D). I'll think about this idea though too, it's definately worth trying.
Thanks for the review, now go check out Poowrite's sequel and Anime Lover's follow-up as well :)