Hah!  This was excellent!  I really like the fact that Yuna almost got caught (I wonder what Tidus would think of her "dirty not-so-little secret" (pun definitely intended)!  I also love it when Yuna gets turned on by the act of messing herself for some reason, so I enjoyed that bit too.  The interaction between Rikku and Yuna was awesome, and the dumps themselves have much better description.  I liked the classic already and you've made it loads better.  Congrats on a job well done!

Author's Response:

What can I say (Ego slowly inflates) I know how to make a great story even greater. All it takes is the right mix of adding new elements and occassionally taking it in a new direction *Head pops*

 

Anyway, thanks for the review.

Git Outta Mai Head!

Seriously, though, great job re-working a classic into something that I enjoyed a lot more. The dump was great, and even better considering whose bottom produced it.

Also, great job of tying my other stories in there. One of these days, we'll have to organize these into a series and fill in the last few blanks (Rikku's accident with the lightening spell, in the farplane and Lulu almost catching Yuna with full panties.)

Great work, as always :)

Author's Response: Yes, Yuna's ass is one of the best fictional poop factories. I'll add the series in a day or two, then we'll both just simply add it alongside the category the stories are in. We can also discuss the remaining gaps, I even have had an idea to get Lulu some action, since she only got some in the first trilogy tale.

I like the idea of linking these stories together and creating a whole series out of them. The character interactions in "Yuna's Close Call" are its strongest feature. Yuna is also more of a sympathetic character for me in this than in other fanfics. I find it a little hard to believe that pooping her pants can cause a woman to have an orgasm. But the scene described presents an interesting picture, despite the "wrongness." On a completely different subject, I love the sentence, "Her pristine teeth shone as she grinned cutely." ^_^

Author's Response: You'll be surprised how the body of a person works depending on how they react to something like a big shit coming out. But yes, I certainly felt that Poowrite's and my stories needed to be tied together. There just seems to be a strong synergy with them than any other stories right now using the same universes.