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Title: Big Brother is watching Reviewer: EFROdian Signed
Ah, I see now.  That makes sense then.  My bad.
Date: Feb 25, 2008 02:32 am [Report This]
Title: Big Brother is watching Reviewer: EFROdian Signed
After Rikku finishes pantypooping, you wrote that Shinra mutteres "something to Brother about his 'interest peaking' and then wandered off."  To me, this sounded like Shinra noticed a certain "growth" of a particular part of Brother and commented on it.  Maybe I simply misinterpreted this, but that's what it seemed like you meant.  I kinda thought it was cool.  Sorry if I misunderstood.

Author's Response: Nah, I meant that Shinra had more or less gotten all the curiosity out of him and was 'bored' of the little peeping game.
Date: Feb 24, 2008 02:43 am [Report This]
Title: Big Brother is watching Reviewer: EFROdian Signed
I, for one, like the fact that the girls were aroused by the act of messing themselves for some reason, so I enjoyed that portion.  I also liked the contrast between Berother, who seemed to be "experienced" with voyer (especially the EFRO kind), while Shinra seemd like a newbie to the lovely EFRO world (although there seems to be great potential for him if he can lighten up a little and give in to his "less sophisticated urges").  I loved the little inuendo about Brother's erection (classic!).  All in all a very nice little story.  Keep it up!

Author's Response:

Inuendo? o_o0

I don't recall anything of the like with Brother. But I'm glad you liked his pervertedness regarding the situation.

Date: Feb 23, 2008 02:39 am [Report This]
Title: Big Brother is watching Reviewer: Poowrite Signed
Of course, the two of us have created a version of the FFX-2 univers that continues to expand like Yuna or Rikku's panties in one of their contests. HA! That was really cheezy ><

In all a great story. Loved the way Brother acted. Spot. On. Great work :)

Author's Response: Well, one good title deserves another. Ever since you did Rikku's fear and People in Spira, we've been kinda following eachother a bit in terms of plotting. So I figured that the stories needed some tieing together.
Date: Feb 21, 2008 07:50 pm [Report This]
Title: Big Brother is watching Reviewer: Jimmy Olsen Signed
"Surveillance" is brief, but it paints a vivid picture of panty-pooping. The dialog is good, too. The orgasms in this fic are pretty unbelievable. I already remarked that I find it hard to believe that pooping her pants can cause a woman to have an orgasm. Well I find it even harder to believe that it's likely to happen to two girls in the same panty-pooping session. That was the only thing that went over the line in my head. However, it does look like it was typed hastily and would benefit from revision.

Author's Response:

Well I kinda felt there wasn't much need for a terribly long story. Since this is meant to be a bridge between my Yuna and Rikku story and Poowrite's Gullwing sequel, I felt it only need a more vivid detailing of what Rikku mentioned.

 

As for the orgasms, they can stimulate a person in certain ways. Women do seem be more affected by large shits than men, likely because of how the genitals are different between the sexes. But I've seen girls (on video, -_-0) who were cumming as they shitted. While it may be a bit far fetched for a girl to orgasm right then and there from pooping, it's not totally beyond the realms of reality for them to be aroused by the movement.

Date: Feb 21, 2008 07:21 pm [Report This]
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