Author's Response: Glad you liked it. It was pretty easy catching the feel of the anime, especially Dante's love for pizza.
The bathroom break was adequately described, but didn't do a lot for me, and the part after it just confused me (again, no doubt because I'm unfamiliar with the source material). One thing I noticed throughout the story is that many sentences seem to be missing words. You definitely need to proofread this.
Overall it's a good story, but I was disappointed by what followed the great opening sequence.
I don't quite follow what you mean about the rest not following up. But I guess I might have missed detailing the town, though it's hard to describe as it's rarely seen in the show and games. Also, I have trouble keeping up with errors and making sure it comes out right as I go alone, normally realizing the errors after it's done.
Perhaps I'll do some editing tomorrow. Don't think that'd be against the rules.
There were a few mistakes here and there, probably could have been fixed with a bit of polish, but nothing that was to glaring.
In all, good work. Thanks for posting.
That's too bad, but I guess the extreme action game aren't your forte. You should try out the anime, it's really good (Madhouse animated it, so that's plus :D).
One of these days I need to get a more recent writing program that'll fix the mistakes for me (absent mindedness; greatest enemy @_@)