Reviews For The Dirty Deal
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Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Plan B Signed
I did not see that coming. Kind of cute, actually. 
Date: Sep 28, 2010 09:41 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: SakuraLover25 Signed
It's great writing but i think you should continue it with her learning to like it and begins to regress into using diapers. The way you could do it is to have her like the experience and use diapers as a way to relieve the stress of a long business day. Then you could have her like it more and more and fall in love with the lifestyle of diapers, as she regresses into a DL or maybe even an AB. What would really be cool (in a literary sense) is that you then show the contrast with her daughter as her daught is becoming better at potty training and growing out of diapers, therefore showing a role reversal between mother and daughter. This is a really good story and you could make it take many good twists and turns so take advantage of it.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. You have an intriguing idea, but I find adult baby stories unsettling, and have no intention of writing one. However I might bring Rikuko back for stories where diaper use becomes her secret hobby. The stress release thing is a good idea.
Date: Jul 08, 2009 12:20 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Anime Lover Signed
hehe, the surprise ending was great ^_^
Date: Mar 16, 2009 06:53 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Poowrite Signed
HA! Caught me completely by suprise, great ending. And great story. You never fail to impress and entertain me.

Not much to complain about here, I really enjoyed everything about this one.

Great work!

Author's Response: Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on it. ^_^ Now I just hope it gets some competition and this can be a real contest...
Date: Feb 25, 2009 01:53 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

I'll admit I had wondered if she was being forced to do it after she started acting a little relunctant to get completely undressed. Though I would've chalked it up to possibly it being a dignified individual who partakes in a perverted act, and despite attempts to stop, can't (which would have made an interesting psychology angle).

I do think you could've changed some more things about the character since she is far from what Reiko is, but that's just my opinion. Overall it was nice, but I think maybe Rikuko could have acted a little more humiliated, not totally, but enough to ask herself how she could have been dragged down to do something like that.



Author's Response: Thanks for the review. After I decided to change the character I could have gone back and revised the stuff I'd already written to differentiate her further from Reiko, but I was a little sick of writing by that point and decided to just do a find-and-replace on the name and post the fic as is. I may revise it after the voting is over (assuming someone else ever posts an entry). And I agree, I could have delved further into the humiliation. I've often been surprised when I see normally serious people being silly/childish when interacting with their kids, and I have to wonder if they feel undignified or embarrassed to be in that kind of situation.
Date: Feb 24, 2009 11:57 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: N Signed
I must admit...

I was surprised.

Well played.
Date: Feb 24, 2009 10:55 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Teesle Signed
Yes, it certainly did, I was wondering the whole time who she was actually talking to

Author's Response: Good to know. I was trying to make it look like she was putting on a show for a lover who enjoyed that sort of thing.
Date: Feb 24, 2009 07:46 am [Report This]
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