I can't really think of anything else to say about it. It was a quick, fun read. Good work.
Awesome! As always you never fail to make an exciting story about defecation.
My only criticism would have to be a few spelling errors (the guy's thinking should be in italic or something to distinguish it better) and it might have worked to have given more description to the two characters for people who might not know what they look like. Also, I think it's odd that the guy freaked out when the fireball entered outhouse, then just seemed confused when she's exposed to the world.
Overall, a great new story. Glad to see another author getting back into the game.
I thought it was refreshing to have a male main character. In most of the fics on this site the women get 99% of the attention of the narrative and the men are treated like excess baggage.
The outhouse ambush was clever and entertaining, although I have to wonder why the toilet paper wasn't destroyed with the walls. And after that's over, you give us the wonderful mental image of a chick using an outhouse with no walls while nonchalantly chatting with a guy nearby.
And the entertainment Lute provides goes way beyond her bodily function. You gave her a lot of great lines.
Besides the toilet paper error (maybe not really an error) I can't think of anything to criticize about this. It only had 1 spelling mistake that I noticed, which is a lot less than usual. Great job, and I hope to read more from you soon!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I've fixed some of the things that you and Orpheum mentioned. Also, as this is the first in a series based on the support conversation mechanic in the Fire Emblem series, it's going to focus mostly on male/female couples from the games that I found particularly interesting. So upcoming editions should also feature male characters that I'm actually interested in writing about.