But of course my favorite part was Wolf and her bodily functions. Here are the passages I thought were especially well-written: "Her light blonde hair obscured her eyes, which were cold and hungry, like a wolfs." "...immediately the feeling of cold air on exposed skin became apparent as Sniper Wolf began to regain consciousness." "Wolf gasped through clenched teeth as she felt her bowels finally give way." "Like a rubber glove being filled with oatmeal, the seat of Sniper Wolf's suit steadily began to bulge and sag with a sizable load." You also use some great descriptive language in the scene where she's force-fed the laxative.
Some proofreading would be helpful. Here are a couple of the more noticeable mistakes. You wrote "phased" when you meant "fazed," and I think you meant to say the leader's face was "scarred," not "scared." There's a verb missing from this sentence: "From afar, it didn't look like much, but up close, one could the intricate details of a chip." This is redundant: "...it would appear that the commotion had not drawn much attention, at least it didn't seem to." You also seem to imply that South America is a country.
As for the content, I don't know how to suggest making this any more awesome than it already is. Maybe some fear could be added, or humiliation. Maybe have a scene in her home base where she has to remove her loaded panties in front of everybody, and isn't allowed to go clean up until the technicians locate the chip in the mess. But the way it ends now is satisfying.
Since you used almost all of the detailed scenario I posted on the forum, I'd appreciate it if you'd mention in your notes somewhere that I made a contribution to the story.
A very entertaining new "file." Wolf isn't exactly my favorite kind of female character, but you've shown me just how entertaining she can be.
Duley noted. Though I meant it was an unspecified "south american" country, like how they usually do it in shows were they don't specify an exact place on a continent. Also, I had mentioned that most of what you had suggested was thought out, the only key points I took advantage of were the part with Wolf already being captured and the switcheraroo of sorts.
Anyway, glad you enjoyed the chapter. It did take longer than I expected to get off the ground, and definitely will need a "Special edition hyper master rerelease" to make it out better. :P