Not much to complain about here. I really enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.
Author's Response: Thank you for all the compliments! It's funny that you don't care much for the anime, as I absolutely loved your take on it. It took me ten years of loving these characters to create something like this...
Not a bad end. Though I wonder if Tenchi would have gotten that mad. Granted I know he's gotten fed up with Ryoko, but still I wonder if he'd feel a little guilty *he is that kind of nice guy when he's justified in being upset* Anyway, a nice conclusion to a story. It's good finally see a new Tenchi story since there's only my two, Poowrite epic multi-part one and the short bit by Omnipresent.
Author's Response: I was thinking about that myself the last few times I read it over. The story was set in the strait to video universe, but his reaction is more like how he acts in the T.V. universe. (Where he's actually kind of a jerk at times.) It was first thing in the morning and that's probably more like what a real person would do. Anyway, thanks again, I love the Tenchi universes.
waw, 5 girls on the potty? Nothing better than this ^^
Good job, buddy... and nice scenes also...
Author's Response: Thank you. I figured, why do a Tenchi story without all the girls?
Very nice. Seems almost like a less choatic take on my "No Need for desperation" *which I would bet played some inspiration, no? ;)* Anyway, characters were spot on, though I would think maybe Washu wouldn't quite care about about being walked in on, being the egghead she is, she's likely have discarded modesty and all of that.
I liked the little bit about Kiyone's past, I actually see a potential 'prequel' when you think about it. The story of how Mihoshi met Kiyone; on the crapper! *Granted I can't recall how they met in each continuity, then again I think Kiyone never appeared in the Tenchi Muyo *even the post anime stuff*
Anyway, wording and so on was perfect, though I found it odd how almost all the girl's kept saying 'ta poop/pee'. At first it seemed like a cute speech thing, but then after the fifth time it seemed like a weird spelling error gone rempant. But that's the only major thing I noticed. Aside from that I think it'd been nice to see more focus on Sasami since all the other girls seem to be getting a lot of attention.
Overall, another excellent Tenchi story!
Author's Response: Thank you Orpheum. You said in a response to a review of your story, “Every time I write something I feel like I screwed up, but people still really like it.” That's exactly how I feel. I must have issues too. This story grew from the basic idea of a girl going in another's stench. I can't say it was directly inspired by N.N.F.D., except that it showed me that the Tenchi characters could work so well in Nyou stories, and prompted me to give them each a turn. I understand your take on Washu and I can think of some examples from the anime to support it. Maybe we can imagine she was just as upset about having her work (both kinds), interrupted as being caught with her pants down. Even with no “primitive notion of modesty”, I imagine if someone walked in on her, she would still tell them to get out instead of striking up a conversation. I tried to add a few allusions to past incidents to make the conversation more interesting and in character. It is a great scenario and I'm getting ideas already... I may have to add something to my future projects list. Kiyone wasn't in the “T.V. Anime”, the first one made. She was added in the second, straight to video, alternate universe series, that this fic. is based on. I don't remember if it described exactly how they met. The reason I use “ta” in all the dialog is because that's the way I talk in real life. To me “to” just sounds too formal for actual speech, but now that you mention it, I totally understand how it could get really annoying to some people. Maybe I'll change it. Sasami is just a bit too “loli” for me and I wasn't really comfortable doing a whole scene with her. That's why I didn't bring the reader into the bathroom with her like I did the others. She was meant to be more of a supporting character in this, serving another function besides pooping.