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Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed
Pretty nice. It is a bit odd how one moment it sounds like a pseudo futuristic story, then becomes a Pervy Potter near the end. Still, it was pretty nice. Though I feel a bit cheated the eggs weren't real this time (well, organic :P). I can imagine a more nitpicky person like Jimmy though will probably wonder why there isn't more explanation to the world, but I think it works out well enough, being a stand alone that could flesh out if you so choose.

Author's Response:

glad you liked it. but how does the story sound futuristic? Wait, you're probobly refering to the combination of technolegy and magic, given the chair and later use of magic. my goal with this series is that it's like the world of harry potter,(I've actually thought about having the setting be in the HP world but in a different part of the world) I've seen the movies and as far as I know the world is depicted as regular everyday life, but magic exists, in secret i think? You you can think of this series as happening in the near/alternate future with all the usual technolegy but magic is present too.

I try not to make the magic seem too focused on, with spells flying everywhere, but still present. Like if you have the thought, "Oh yeah, they can use magic." then I'm happy.

another example from HP, when the characters wern't in Hogworts they didn't use magic all that much IIRC, but did much more when they were at the school.

Anyway, thanks for reading ^_^ 

Date: Sep 27, 2012 04:47 pm [Report This]
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