Author's Response: It's both? Its based in a fantasy world but I'm focusing on the fetishes in it.
Overall, a very good story that I enjoyed reading. I can honestly say that I have never read a story that features such a tremendous load.
Other reviews have hit on most of the problems I would point out, so I'll just leave you with a "Good job" and hope to see moure.
Author's Response: Thank you for the huge compliment! I'm glad you enjoyed.:D Hopefully the next time I bring back Zaria she will have the chance to unload EVERYTHING. My prayers go to the bathroom she uses.
An interesting story, and a nice big load. But it needs some work. There are plenty of parts where the past/present tense of things gets a bit confusing, and some parts of the story could use a bit of fleshing out.
Overall, it's a good story.
Author's Response: Thank you for the feedback and glad you liked the story. I do apologize for the tense issues and I hope it didn't take to much away from the overall story.
Author's Response: Thank you! And very nice play with words ;)
There are some spelling issues, missing words and tenses changing around at random, but at least the main event is well done and enjoyable.
One thing that may or may not be intentional: is this supposed to be a medieval setting or a modern one? We've got zippers and flush toilets (and possibly a 20-story hotel, but I can't tell if that's metaphorical) along with demons, melee weapons and a "fireball" of some kind.
Author's Response: Thanks for the critique! And I apologize that i'm not clear on the setting. But the setting is near future/modern day. Only that demons roam the lands at this time. It's all based on my own novel I'm currently writing and Zaria is the main female character from it. And the 20-story was literal. I hope this clears things up a bit and i'm glad you enjoyed. :)
Author's Response: I'm very glad you enjoyed it. I expect there will be more of Zaria in the future ;)
Author's Response: Thank you:)