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Title: Prolouge Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed
Interesting idea, but could use some touching up. The dialogue and narrative parts need to be better defined from each other, and it feels a little quick, you should throw in some mentions to things relating to Fallout Lore (like the vaults and so on).

Author's Response: Thanks, man! I'll throw in some Vaults and what-not along the way. I'll fix up the prolouge to mention them and even mention them later. However, the part we're waiting for comes up later in chapter one when I appear and get shot by a female Raider. It's a self-insertion because I thought it would be cool. Just saying.
Date: Mar 11, 2013 04:25 pm [Report This]
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