Awesome. Didn't expect to see this chapter get a tune-up as well. Actually quite nice, since each scene does feel more different, and the added bonus will satisfy any who wanted more than just crap :P
A few spelling errors here and there "TOO Garnet", not "two", lol
But nothing serious.
Anyway, some additional ideas for that Zidane x Garnet thing I mentioned. Since it seems like Garnet is most an anal virgin (at least to my understanding), perhaps after you have her return home, she willingly gives it up to Zidane, while showing what her royal tush can dish out before hand... and then getting a butt full of Zidane's tail, maybe even with some quip like "you said liked having a tail, I'm just lending you mine." XP
Still, great work as always.
I'm glad you're happy with the changes and additions, my plan was to edit this chapter, but I didn't want to change this one without the first.
and in this story, Garnet isn't really an anal virgin, she's just very 'reserved' when it comes to sex around other people, especially those like Yuna and Rikku, so open and eager about it, except Zidane.
I was a little concerned about including a yuri scene in a 'fetish' fic, cause, people would read this for the pooping, not really the sex. Not to mention you wanted a scat fic, not a sex one. In my initial version of the fic, particularly, chapter two, I tried to make Yuna and Garnet's orgasms purposly less descriptive than I usually do, so it wouldn't be too distracting from the main theme of the fic.
Clearly, though, for the edit, I made the orgasms a little more descriptive and I actually included a sex scene.
Actually, I wanted to include a small masturbation scene with Garnet at the end of the first chapter, but I reluctantly decided against it.