Reviews For Desperate Witches
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Title: Gryffindor Gals, A Prelude Reviewer: ackatt Signed
a huge improvement, will be reading this one
Date: Apr 25, 2014 08:09 pm [Report This]
Title: Gryffindor Gals, A Teaser. Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed
Promising, but could be better. For one, a teaser shouldn't feel like it's a jumble of sentences and paragraphs thrown together. And some of the language the girls use feels too out of character.
Date: Apr 13, 2014 11:31 pm [Report This]
Title: Gryffindor Gals, A Teaser. Reviewer: Toasty Signed
Very nice! Good descriptions, concise but effective. I noticed a few errors ("she hurriedly gathered her belongs," etc.) which didn't really detract too much from the story, but maybe consider proofreading it a little more next time.

Looking forward to more!
Date: Apr 12, 2014 03:19 pm [Report This]
Title: Gryffindor Gals, A Teaser. Reviewer: ackatt Signed

it's a bit rushed for me. maybe that's cause it's a preview.

i know it's a fap fic but they all just seem totally out of character which breaks the immersion.

still, i'll be keeping an eye on this story. very hopeful.

Date: Apr 12, 2014 04:29 am [Report This]
Title: Gryffindor Gals, A Teaser. Reviewer: Anastyanax Signed
Fantastic so far, can't wait to read more. Your descriptions are concise but thorough, and your imagery rich.
Date: Apr 12, 2014 02:07 am [Report This]
Title: Gryffindor Gals, A Teaser. Reviewer: Specd8 Signed
Looks interesting so far. Saying this was a teaser, can we get a full-length soon? Also, detail is appreciated.
Date: Apr 11, 2014 06:37 am [Report This]
Title: Gryffindor Gals, A Teaser. Reviewer: Jadedragoon56 Signed
Excellent! Eagerly awaiting more! Could I humbly request a bit more farting?
Date: Apr 10, 2014 06:26 pm [Report This]
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