Reviews For Ahsokas messy escape
Cale, a Round Robin is other users can add chapters to your story
Date: Jul 18, 2014 12:35 am [Report This]
Your writing is pretty good. The character interactions are done reasonably well, the actions could use a little work but that is why we practice, no?
The biggest problem here actually is probably the easiest fixed, the wall of text really needs to be broken up into paragraphs. If your having trouble with the site formatting here's what I do. Left facing arrow < then lower case "p" then a right facing arrow > No spacing. That at the start of every paragraph should get around any format issues
Lastly, even though this is essentially a work of fan fiction you still should work on setting. Tell us who she is, where she is, why she's escaping. It'll really help with the quality of the piece.
Well, that's all for now. I wish you luck and happy writing
-Echo
Date: Jul 12, 2014 09:17 am [Report This]
For a practice story, this is quite good. It's a bit short, but still good. I'd be Hapoy to contribute to the Round Robin.
Date: Jul 08, 2014 10:48 pm [Report This]