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Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Fun story, though I would say some of Olivier's comments seemed a bit out of character. She's the kind who shrugs off most concepts of "shame" and "decency", as she believes living tough means having little shame beyond the importance of loyalty and commitment.

Beyond that, I say you need to rework the layout, it's all mostly blocks of text and that makes things very annoying for readers when they easily lose their place. 

Date: Mar 07, 2015 02:54 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: livinginfinite Signed
It's about time someone wrote a story about Olivier!

Author's Response: Thank you, honestly half the reason I did it was because not many people do and that saddened me a little bit so at least there's another now. It may not be the best but it might inspire a few people with the skill necessary to make a excellent one.
Date: Dec 26, 2014 02:54 pm [Report This]
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