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Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Poowrite Anonymous

A very nice read! I never played the first game, which I suspect this is based on, but remember Keira from the second and third games. Good to see a story of her pop up on the site!

I liked the way she had to keep thinking on her toes to hide what she'd done from Jak and Daxter. Having her have to confront them with a messy bottom was a nice touch with a little more originality that the obvious: having her confront them while actually having to go. Of course, that would make a good story too!

Anyway, great work as always! 



Author's Response: Thanks. Nice to know you liked it. And yes, it's based on the first game, which was when Jak didn't talk, and the story was more kid friendly than the GTA like antics of the latter titles.
Date: Mar 18, 2015 01:51 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Waru Signed
You did an excellent job, both descriptively, visually, and tying in the moments from the game.

Author's Response:

Glad you liked it. I was going to originally do it more like the idea we had batted around, with her just walking a path and stopping to drop a deuce, then I figured this was funner.

Date: Feb 11, 2015 05:19 pm [Report This]
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