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Title: Tifas predicament Reviewer: DaveTheKing12799 Signed
I like the story Idea but it kinda seemed rushed I persoanally think that strories should have some good amount of detail to add a better image to it while also cpaturing the scenes in the story that's what I think would make your stories liek 10x better I hope that idea helps
Date: Feb 05, 2016 09:12 am [Report This]
Title: Tifas predicament Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Not a bad first effort, but certainly shows that you're new to writing.

*Too much spacing for every sentence when some can be grouped into paragraphs.
*Descriptions are either too vague (all while fighting monsters along the way), same goes for the pooping action which only details some stuff but nothing to make interesting.
*The characters don't really do anything to feel like their counterparts, just using the names for recognition.

With that said, it's always nice to see some new blood on the site. Hopefully you'll take the criticisms to heart and apply them to a later story or even a revision of this one.
 



Author's Response:

Thanks, i was abit nervous writing this, it was actully suppose to be part of an interactive story in writting.com,but the guy who made it just deleted his account along with his stuff.

his name i think was "atoz" do you know what happen to him?

 

Date: Feb 03, 2016 10:36 pm [Report This]
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