Reviews For Asuka's release
Very good story
Date: Nov 07, 2017 11:19 pm [Report This]
Very well done. Creative and descriptive. A masterpiece!
Date: Dec 20, 2016 03:24 am [Report This]
Nice story! Some parts need help though. First, I think that it would be way better to add sound effects. Another thing is that Asuka seems unrealistic with "Head sized breasts". Finally, Asuka's bloated tummy makes her look ugly. Otherwise, good story!
Date: Aug 12, 2016 07:28 pm [Report This]
Nice to see you doing something here again, been so long.
I will say it does feel a bit unpolished, some spelling errors and a few of the descriptors feel lacking, not having as much of your wonderful phrasing for the meatier details (such as Asuka's curvy body; the "head sized round breasts" just not having quite the oomph you usually have). With that said, it's great to see another of your signature toilet clogging stories, and it did remind of that one with Rei you had mentioned some time back concerning her and the experimental substance.
Welcome back!
I will say it does feel a bit unpolished, some spelling errors and a few of the descriptors feel lacking, not having as much of your wonderful phrasing for the meatier details (such as Asuka's curvy body; the "head sized round breasts" just not having quite the oomph you usually have). With that said, it's great to see another of your signature toilet clogging stories, and it did remind of that one with Rei you had mentioned some time back concerning her and the experimental substance.
Welcome back!
Date: Aug 07, 2016 02:17 am [Report This]