No! Dont encourage this! 

You are so darn close to being decent at grammar! COME ON! Just the "I" needs to be capitalized, and a few apostrophes are needed here and there. I'm not a big fan of vomit, but hey, this is your story. There is a problem that actually seems to catch me... It's repetitive. Of course, the story is nothing like any of your old ones when it comes to plot. The problem I notice is that you pretty much copy/paste whatever happened to Emily two times over, and replaced the second copy's "Emily" to "Lena". What I'm saying is that nearly the same exact things happened to both Emily and Lena. Still, you are definitely getting better... Keep up the good work!

While the grammar still needs some work... the simple fact that it has vomit, which is so rare in stories here and also by far my biggest fetish, especially when done in detail like here, in addition to diarrhea pretty much demands that I rate it high. I would love to see more stories involving the former.

Author's Response: Maybe i could do some vomit stories in the future, not my thing but i wanna give it a try for this story, thanks for the review