As Orpheum said, the spelling and grammar is better but not perfect. That has never been a big problem for me as I can understand it perfectly, but I admire your effort to try. Someday someone (with better writing skills than me) could go through and fix just that stuff.
I love the new additions. The expanded descriptions add to and update this classic. I'm guessing the toilet alarm light was inspired by S2X's Princess Peach pic. some time ago. It fits nicely with this futuristic setting. Ed's comments about Faye's butt where funny and fitting.
Someday, I hope to see the follow-up story you mentioned in one review. I'd love to know the history behind Faye's digestion, maybe her in school from the old tape in that one episode.
You've returned! And brought a gift! Fantastic. While I can see nothing terribly great has change indeed, it's still cool to see the old gem updated and given a tune up.
The ending does feel more well suited, as Faye would likely try to get others to deal with her messes.
A few spelling/grammar issues (witch instead of "which"), a space between Ed's question about Faye's poop and Ein waking her. And there should be a word between might and start (like "might be starting to get to her")
Still, fantastic job, and I do hope this means you'll be delivering on that Eva story you mentioned not too long ago! :)
Just had to review it again. Still one of the most epic dumps I've seen. Though I've been wondering, ever thought of redoing this story? I don't mean totally remaking it perse, but giving it a nice tiddying up. I mean, it's not hard to see the number of spelling errors and too many commas in overly long sentences.
It's still great, but I bet it could be even more grand with some fixing up, especially since you said a sequel is in the works. I usually do a retooling of my stuff to fix any mistakes, but I was just curious if you had any thoughts about doing the same for this.
Anyway, this will always remain a classic among the 'epic mega dumps' however few they may be. :)
Author's Response: Maybe if I am insanely bored one day. And I probably will be.
A classic for the ages, good to finally see it here in all it's shitty (the good kind :P) glory. Too bad there's never been another Faye dumping fic....
Author's Response: Actually, once I finish my current fic a sequel for this is next up. Yes it will contain even more mass & gas exiting Fayes' superb posterior, but there will actually be a plot that among other things explain why she needs to poop like a horse :D