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Title: Everything DOES Come Down to the Poo Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Felt like reviewing this one again. Still a nice little story, but where is the part with Riza?! I demand closure on that part of the story! XP

Only criticism is the spelling errors, hopefully you can fix them when you have time. By the way, are we gonna see any stories where Jessica gets humiliated?

Date: Jul 20, 2008 09:44 pm [Report This]
Title: The Problem and the Solution Reviewer: DrBones Signed
Good work.  I've wanted to see Winry in a situation like this ever since I first saw her in the ending credits.

This fic. fit the feel of the series prefectly.  Reading this was like watching an anime to the point that I could hear the dub voices saying the lines.

Reading a story writen in the present tense is different but not a problem as long as it's consistent. 

At first I would have thought that Al would be a little more shy about this sort of thing, but it made sense as something they had been sharing all there lives.  There's nothing in the series that says they couldn't have been doing this kind of thing.  I have to think though, that if I could watch Winry on the pot anytime I wanted, I might have just fogotten about the Stone and stayed home!

I also enjoyed Sheska getting in on the action even if it wasn't shown.  It would be nice to see this side of the story, you know she would have to be reading wile she went.  That could be a sequel right there; Sheska can't go until Armstrong finds her a book.   
Date: Nov 04, 2007 10:15 pm [Report This]
Title: The Problem and the Solution Reviewer: EFROdian Signed

I ask for another Full Metal fic, and you deliver a great piece like this, well-done!  I must admit I really wish that someday I'll find a girl like Winry.  Also, I was dissappointed that Winry went to all that trouble, but the way you solved it using Sheska removed any doubts I had.  I especially liked how she was so embarrassed about the situation (shy girls are so cute when it comes to that kind of thing!).  A pure success if I do say so myself.  MORE PLEASE!!!

Date: Oct 29, 2007 03:06 am [Report This]
Title: The Problem and the Solution Reviewer: Poowrite Signed
I really liked it. I'm not a big FMA fan, but I really like these stories.

I felt a little bad for Winry. All that work ... It was a nice twist though, I thought the story was going to end up badly for the residents of Rush Valley.

Good work, thanks for posting :).
Date: Oct 28, 2007 11:07 am [Report This]
Title: Everything DOES Come Down to the Poo Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Great, nice pooping action and a fairly good twist. Almost like a demented version of those novels they make (being an unrelated event to the anime/manga). Though I was still hoping you'd also cover Riza's little 'business'. Maybe you could do two mini chapters, one for Riza and another for Sheska (she's second to Winry for me, those glasses make her so cute).

Once more I'll mention the past/present tense hopping, but again it's not that bad. I would say it'd be nice if you played more of Ed and Winry's feelings, like more private thoughts with them and so on.

 

All in all, a great fiction and very well done. ^__^ *Big thumps up*

Date: Oct 28, 2007 02:04 am [Report This]
Title: The Problem and the Solution Reviewer: OrpheumZero Signed

Very nice start, it feels just something out of FMA. Though I can see it doesn't tie into the anime or manga, but then again that's not important.

 

I do have to point out your useage of 'past-tense' and 'present-tense' wording. You need to watch out for that, but otherwise a very well done story.

Now if you'll excuse, I'm on to chapter 2! *Jumps onto a cyberhorse (Vampire Hunter D creature) and gallops away*

Date: Oct 28, 2007 01:43 am [Report This]
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