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Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: FallenStar Signed

Wow... That was certainly different.  I was NOT aware that MS Word could be used that way, hehe.

Other than the normal grammar errors, though, I can find very little wrong with this fic, though I, too, am not really a fan of blood, nor anal, nor of the "ahem"  background.  

The idea, though, of Su inventing that certainly seems plausible, and, since I know there's a pic that's done in the same style, I'd look forward to seeing a fic on that, though, of course, I'd probably want Su's fantasy to be something to do with WS, lol.

Great job as always, AL.

 

FallenStar 

Date: Nov 03, 2007 10:41 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Poowrite Signed
Not bad,I don't know much about love Hina but this was pretty good. Nice sex scenes, you cover all her holes ^~
Date: Nov 02, 2007 08:37 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: EFROdian Signed
Hey, nice fic!  I love seeing the"innocent" cute little Shinobu being "not so innocent."  There were only two problems I had with this story.  The first is that I'm really not a fan of blood when it comes to sex,and even though I enjoyed Shinobu losing her virginity, I cringed at the mention of blood.  The second was that I really wanted you to finish the anal part of it (I'm a big fan), but I guess since it was hurting Shinobu too much, I'm glad it stopped.  If there's one thing I DON'T want to read about it's Shinobu in pain!  All in all, a very good fic.  Keep it up! 

Author's Response:

Thx

now that you read the 'lesser' version, how about e-mailing me and I'll send you the the original, intended version. It'll make  rereading it more enjoyable, at least IMO ^_^

Date: Nov 02, 2007 03:45 am [Report This]
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