but still the end leaves me wondering how she's going to explain to the rest of the gang, as their going to notice a return to the past.
Author's Response:
I currently have no plans for any Code Lyoko fics after this one, but I'm sure it wouldn't stop anyone else from doing pooping in Lyoko ^_^
Yanno, I never really thought about how Aelita would explain the return to that past to the others ^_^;
This wasn't half bad. Though I would have liked to have seen some pooping action, it wasn't without it's 'perks'. Though I could've sworn that Sissi knew about the Super Computer at the end of the season/series, just not every little detail about it.
Anyway, hopefully we can see some virtual pooping on Lykoko. That's something I always thought be neat to see, and when you think about it..... Aelita's bowels don't have to necessarily adhere to real life rules in the Super Computer ;)....
Pretty good, not too crazy about this sort of thing, but it's a nice change from the usual sort of story here.
anyway, if I were XANA, had access to Aelita's source code and wanted to groud her via embarassment I think I'd create a routine that robs her of bowel control :).
As always, great work and thanks for sharing!
Author's Response: That may work for the real world, but not in Lyoko IMO, concidering, usually, any 3d/cgi imege or vid of a body lacks any genitals or even nipples, such as say the character models of DOA (male or felame), even if you remove all there clothes, there would be nothing there, until of course you use your imagination ^_^
Not bad, while I'm more for the fetish side of things, this was still a pretty funny story. Kinda like those more humorous doujins where the characters seem to be aware their in a more perverted situation.
I was gonna say, this certainly couldn't fit into the continuity of the first three, but still a nice addition to the Code Lyoko stories.
By the way, William can talk. He's actually gotten a bit chatty as season 4 has gone on, but it's that weird distorted voice like someone possessed when he talks, and it's assumed to be nothing but XANA doing the talking with no hint of William's personality at all.
Author's Response:
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it ^_^
From the other two sites I've posted this on both replies I've gotten ask when a sequal will be made, since people want it, I may do a part two, staring Yumi and Aelita having fun in Lyoko. It'd most likly lack a plot like this one though if I got around to doing it.
Author's Response:
Thx, I'm glad you liked it ^_^
From the 1-2 season four eps I've seen, I don't remimber the possessed William talking. I actually planned on William to play with Aelita's body when she ran behind the rock and is save before or after an orgasm, but clearly, that didn't happen.
Author's Response: Those are quite good suggestions, I especially like the Sissi one ^_^ rnrnBut I would need to watch a lot more of the show to see what her character is like, I\'ve only seen a handful of episodes. rnWhen saw random Lyoko episodes, I thought Sissi was Yumi\'s sister, boy was I wrong >.<
My big fear was that you would have 1 or both of the girls would get "overstimulated." I was happy to find it 100% sex-free. I was also happy about Yumi's reaction. She enjoys it and realizes she was too quick to condemn it as wrong, but she doesn't enjoy it immensely. It seems like most stories at Nyou Fiction about deliberate diaper or panty-pooping have the girl think it's the greatest feeling in the world. This story provided a good departure from that trend which is becoming a cliché.
I was afraid the tummy-rubbing was going to turn into something yuri, but you make it come across as a gentle, friendly gesture. But my favorite part isn't the pooping. It's the conversation where Aelita admits she's wearing diapers. It's funny and reveals both their characters well. You also depict Jeremie's embarrassment well. I can just imagine what's going in in his head. I mean, how do you talk to a girl about her diapers? Awkwardness city. ^_^'
It's also nice how the opening scene continues directly from the last Code Lyoko fic. The cooled-down feces is a nice touch, indicating the passage of time and showing how diaper-pooping isn't all pleasant, even for someone who loves it. If Aelita's not careful she'll end up with diaper rash. ^_~
I was disappointed that Yumi didn't pee as well as poop in her diaper. Not only do I like descriptions of wetting more than messing, but it seems to me that logically she would try peeing 1st, since it's less messy and "wrong." It would have been great (from my P.O.V.) if Yumi had had to pee and poop but only agreed to pee in her diaper, until she saw how much Aelita enjoyed pooping in hers. Then Yumi would have tried to add some mess to her wetness but been unable to at first, and from there it would go the way it did in your story.
The pooping seems too brief. It would have been better if Yumi had described to Aelita what the experience felt like to her, and what she liked about it. There doesn't seem to be enough of the kind of friendly dialog that I think would accompany a buddy diaper-dump.
Also, like many stories here, the tense changes. It's mostly in present tense, but sometimes it's in past tense.
But even with these weaknesses this is a very entertaining story, and my favorite that you've written. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading ^_^, I took the fact that it was a challenge from you, (not liking sexual stuff between minors) into consideration, so no sex or arousal stated in this one ^_^ I actually planned on having peeing in the fic, but for some reason it didn\'t make it into the fic. >.<
Cool, nice to see another CL fic. Didn't notice the challenge (guess I looked it over while checking the others out). The pooping scenes were nice, though I think it could've been a tad longer, but still great nonetheless.
Now for the nitpicking! (People gasps and leap from windows):
*You do know that Aelita is a student at Kadic, right? She's enrolled right when season 2 starts and remains so from there on. So she has a dorm at the school.
*Yumi is a 'day-student'; she attends classes at the Acedemy, but still lives at her own house. She has no dorm in the school at all.
*SPOILER: *Don't read if you wish to watch the first 2 seasons*
Aelita is a human, just like the others. Franz Hopper, her father, virtualized themselves 10 years before the series started, where they were attacked by XANA. It (XANA) imprisoned Franz somewhere in the super computer and stole Aelita's human memories, thus linking her to the Super Computer (Which is why she would die if the machine were deactivated before severing that link). Throughout season 1 and early half of 2, she and the group are under the belief she's an advanced A.I program, but after her arrival on earth, she has weird dreams and visions. Soon she is found to be human and the gang attempts to retrieve her memories to fully restore her, but XANA kills her after stealing the rest of her memories (which contain the data needed for It to escape the Super Computer.) But her father who has resurfaced resurrects her by seemingly sacrificing himself and restoring her memories and completely making her human again.
I think my geek-out destroyed a planet or two :P (The Jedis are gonna be pissed, or at least upset...)
Author's Response: Thanks for reading, I was pretty sure Aelita had her own room at the dorm, but I didn\'t know about Yumi >_< I haven\'t really watched much of the series
thanks for the suggestion for a new title, but once I complete a fic, I don't change the name.
Thanks for reading though ^_^
Very nice, and certainly a good continuation of my story.
I actually thought of a better name for this, Aelita's secret, you can use it if you want.