Hm, to tell you the truth, this wasn't as good as I was expecting.

I just recently finished watching every episode of SEL, and I must say that it might be my favorite anime of all time. The whole point was the philosophical aspects, and it was a very deep show. Not as though I was expecting that from a mere fetish story.

However, you did a decent job of representing Lain's personality here. However, since she actually has 3 separate personalities, its a bit difficult to do. You did a nice job with her "real world" sense.

However, due to the lack of build-up and detail, I was having serious trouble actually envisioning this happening, unlike with many other stories on the site. Its probably due to the nature of the characters, rather than due to your writing. To tell you the truth, if I was writing a story based on the Lain series, I wouldn't have picked her to write about. Maybe about her sister, or the three "friends", or possibly that Knights member who was the mom of that five year old (and was totally hot).

I don't know, but its good that you tried, and you did a good job, with what little you had to work with. I hope more people try to write around this anime!

I don't know what this is from, or who Lain is really, but if this was in the show, or game, or whatever, I'd by it ASAP!!!  That was awesome!  I like how words like "chosen one," "destiny," and fate were dancing in her head as she was having her accident (could that have meant that she was "chosen" to soil herself, that it was her "destiny" to have an accident, and that it was "fate" that she saw her friend mess herself as well?  Of course, I'm only joking.  Still a very good story.  Will you be continuing this?